hospice nurse

[Billy]

revision

hospice nurse

up late
the dying have paperwork
i must complete

it says nothing
about their living

i want to be up early
not miss the blood moon
the total eclipse
in the first hours of morning

dreams are about to say
something i won't remember

a shadow
over my mind
will disappear

i'll know
a good thing happened
without a trace



hospice nurse

up late
the dying have paperwork
i must complete

though it says nothing
about their living
i want to be up early

not miss the blood moon
the total eclipse
in the first hours of morning

at that moment
dreams are about to say
something i won't remember

a shadow
over my mind
that will disappear

and i'll know
a good thing happened
without a trace

[Michael (MV)]

 
Hi Billy,


This is as an example of a poem that is rightly enriched by its phantom punctuation.


"a shadow
over my mind
that will disappear"


^^ that is Universal - speaks of the patient & of the nurse



of every one



Michael (MV)

 
 
 
 

 
 
 
 
  
 

[Billy]

Thanks for your generous remarks, Michael. I like this poem very much. It was nothing I did; it just rolled out of the ether.

[Michael (MV)]

 
Hi Billy,

reading this again 6 weeks later:


a shadow
over my mind
that will disappear

and we'll know
what's right happens
without leaving a trace

or

and we'll know
what's right happens
without leaving a doubt





Michael (MV)

and we'll know
what's right takes place
as clean as a cross