The Kettle Conundrum

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shriiram
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The Kettle Conundrum

#1 Post by shriiram » 18 May 2015, 11:49

only birds understand
the blunt-beaked guilt of a kettle,
listen to its shrillness,
and know that it cannot enumerate wings.

but the kettle understands
that its very presence allows water
not a moment of peace,
wings or not.

that’s why kettles in my verse
tend to lie face down in brown thicket
or black swamps,

while a bird flying from page 7 to 13
fills forests in-between.

Michael (MV)
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Re: The Kettle Conundrum

#2 Post by Michael (MV) » 03 Jun 2015, 10:07

 
Hi shriiram,


Interesting, with the phonetics of title words "Kettle Conundrum," my inner-ear hears also "kettledrum."

and I hear another image/phrase: heavy metal conundrum   :)


I read the poem as Peace is Freedom --

^^ " just like the white winged dove" to reference an image from the lyricist Stevie Nicks.


Formally, these 13 lines are similar to the 14 line sonnet - the artistic logic, volta(turning), and concluding couplet.

"while a bird flying from page 7 to 13
fills forests in-between."

^^ skillful the rhyming of 13 & in-between


illustrated re capitalizing & a few other suggestions:

Only birds understand
the blunt-beaked guilt of a kettle,
hear the shrillness of metal drum
and know it cannot enumerate wings.

But the kettle understands
its very presence allows water
not a moment of peace,
wings or not.

That’s why kettles in my verse
tend to lie facedown in brown thicket
or black swamps,

while a bird flying from page 7 to 13
fills forests in-between.


shriiram,

if you don't aren't already have a poem representing another,
would you please consider The Kettle Conundrum to represent the WB.

Please accept or decline in the thread @ Palaver: Upcoming June IBPC 2015:

viewtopic.php?f=3&t=6079


Thanks

8)

Michael (MV)


 

 

 

 
 
 

 

 

 

SivaRamanathan
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Re: The Kettle Conundrum

#3 Post by SivaRamanathan » 16 Jul 2015, 19:35

Michael

I second your nomination of Sriiram's poem 'The Kettle Conundrum,'though I know it is not necessary.

S

Bernie01
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Joined: 30 Jul 2015, 11:14

Re: The Kettle Conundrum

#4 Post by Bernie01 » 30 Jul 2015, 11:27

creative concept and this is wonderful:




while a bird flying from page 7 to 13
fills forests in-between.

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