Noises in the Background

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SivaRamanathan
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Noises in the Background

#1 Post by SivaRamanathan » 15 Aug 2015, 14:34

My daughter is shelling green peas
and plump in the middle
a lady's finger squats, smiling.

The children are quite serious about it
pondering on how to gobble the crunchy vegetable;
just then it lands up somewhere on the table.

Now it is their turn to caution me;
good it turned out be a green thingy.
What if it had been an uncle crab?

Bernie01
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Re: Noises in the Background

#2 Post by Bernie01 » 02 Sep 2015, 06:01

Siva---

i especially like the title.

the narrative flow is smooth, yet inventive.

good poem.


bernie

SivaRamanathan
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Re: Noises in the Background

#3 Post by SivaRamanathan » 02 Sep 2015, 12:45

Bernie
I was feeling ashamed of this poem.Every night I wanted to delete it.Who writes about vegetables,now a days?But my 'poet mind' makes up images while doing the household chores.So I have learnt a lesson today.What you think should be trashed need not necessarily be mundane to the reader with a sense of humour.
Thanks for just being there.
S

Bernie01
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Re: Noises in the Background

#4 Post by Bernie01 » 02 Sep 2015, 21:09

Siva---


loved your comment.


bernie

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