Holding on to a Thread

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Holding on to a Thread

#1 Post by Billy » 30 Dec 2015, 02:18

Holding on to a Thread

Working and scheming, I walk
as if a spider in this web. Waiting
the best part and the worst. Stuck

mid-air to a notion I can't get
out of my head. Work hard and
it will come to you. Center your

thoughts, believe, they tell you.
And you wait. Seasons circle.
Loose ends need repair. A move

when circumstances prevail. Then
working and scheming, waiting
all over again. Night your savior.

The sticky thread's an art, a living,
a window of chance stretched
across the infinite realm of desire.

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Re: Holding on to a Thread

#2 Post by Billy » 18 Jan 2016, 01:06

This is revised.

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Re: Holding on to a Thread

#3 Post by SivaRamanathan » 18 Jan 2016, 20:41

Billy

The sticky threads an art, a living,

The sticky thread's an art,a living
or
The sticky thread is an art,a living

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Re: Holding on to a Thread

#4 Post by Billy » 19 Jan 2016, 02:23

Thanks Siva, missed that.

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Re: Holding on to a Thread

#5 Post by FredFourth » 20 Jan 2016, 04:55

The sticky thread's an art, a living,

There is no apostrophe in Sticky, it cannot mean: The sticky thread is an art if it is then you must use 'is', an apostrophe is not correct.

It must mean: The sticky thread, an art, a living.

In my opinion.

Siva, always a space after a comma.

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Re: Holding on to a Thread

#6 Post by Billy » 26 Jan 2016, 03:01

's can be the contraction for the sticky thread is. One can tell grammatically whether the 's is possessive or a contraction. It can also be the contraction has, ie, nobody's met him.

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