Parfum

[Bernie01]

Parfum de Dimanche


In France
a girl may date
her professor
without hiding.


Or a man old
as her father
tottering in
États-Unis.


My professor
redolently gorgeous.
A Florida
coed.


My exchange
student girl
friends
turned green.


He spanked
my hips turning
them red as barber
poles.


To lounge afterwards
like a barefoot boy
on a river dock
in Missouri.


He only knew
Harvard so I told him
Missouri was the first name
for the University.


His eyes swelled
to ovals when I described
how girls there expected
a spanking once a week.


My hips
hot as safety matches
raked by his voluminous
eyes shaggy as all summer.


Careless white grub,
bread and wine
inflicted across the moon's
white ass.

[Michael (MV)]

 
Hi Bernie,

upon a 1st read-thru:


I find the short lines, in general, effective; yet might revisit the one-word lines.


I heard this variation for the last stanza:

Careless grub -
bread and wine
inflicted across the white
ass of the moon.


"Parfum" is sufficient as title - unless maybe Le Parfum Sabbatique


Illustrated below for your perusal       Michael (MV)  


In France
a girl may date
her professor
without hiding;

or a man old
as her father
tottering in
États-Unis.

My professor
redolently gorgeous.
A Floridian coed.

My exchange
student girl
friends turned green.

He spanked
my hips turning
them red
as barber poles.

To lounge afterwards
like a barefoot boy
on a river dock
in Missouri.

He only knew
Harvard so I told him
Missouri was the first
name for the University.

His eyes swelled
to ovals when I described
how girls there expected
a spanking once a week.

My hips hot
as safety matches
raked by his voluminous
eyes shaggy as all summer.

Careless white grub,
bread and wine
inflicted across the white
ass of the moon.

 
 
 
 
 
 
 

[BobBradshaw]

I really enjoyed this poem...it was very different. The spanking hips stanza was good, unexpected...yet this traditional stanza is excellent as well:

To lounge afterwards
like a barefoot boy
on a river dock
in Missouri.

[Michael (MV)]

bernie,

if you don't already have a poem committed to represent another board this November IBPC 2016,
then please consider allowing - Parfum - to represent for the Block.

Accept or decline in this thread at Palaver Upcoming November IBPC 2016 viewtopic.php?f=3&t=6390

If accepting, then please provide in that thread
a final edition of the poem as you would like it forwarded to the finals
and all the other needed info, as delineated in the initial entry of that thread.


Thanks bernie



Michael (MV)