City Ennui
Saigon buses shimmy
my room, a busty lemon
rolls on the empty table.
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Noisy motorcycle riders
parade in sun and noise,
odious gas cloud tattoo.
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Green bikes shimmer
shiny as ornaments
in an American Christmas.
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Banners swarm lunch stalls,
bus passengers shuffle,
children driven from home.
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Pedicabs dodge and toddle,
parcels carried in stacks,
boxes for someone else.
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Below, lunch counter men
speak fast, soup steams,
noodles disappear pronto.
City Ennui
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SivaRamanathan
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Re: City Ennui
Like reading these 'Haiku.' Will be rereading them in the course of the day.
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BobBradshaw
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Re: City Ennui
There are some nice, tightly written stanzas. I like the energy, and common joy in the last one...ah, how fast life disappears...savor it...it goes by so fast...pronto!
Below, lunch counter men
speak fast, soup steams,
noodles disappear pronto.
Below, lunch counter men
speak fast, soup steams,
noodles disappear pronto.
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SivaRamanathan
- Posts: 1168
- Joined: 14 May 2011, 20:30
Re: City Ennui
I nominate 'City Ennui' for the IBPC January.
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