I sat in a liquid sac,
you protected me from all harm,
fed me warmth and sustenance.
You felt me grow, not as an alien,
but as part of you. How wonderful,
you have made a man-child.
My heart beats from week six,
by seven it is strong and regular.
At ten I am officially a fetus,
by eleven I breathe amniotic fluid,
soon to kick and exercise my limbs.
At twenty two I am fully formed,
the size of a mango, the following
week I hear voices, I relate, I welcome
your voice, it comforts me.
Week twenty three, you exercise
your legal right to terminate.
I leave the womb in a rush of discomfort,
of fierce light and loud noise,
I try to breathe, I am left alone on a slab,
I want you to hold me, to comfort me.
I need you Mom . . .
my love is eternal,
End
Ieuan ap Hywel
P.s. need help with this on spacing, I need the last line centred
to indicate distance.
What Aja Monet Didn't Read at Women's March on Washington
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I would start the poem with the third stanza, where the poem really begins to strengthen. Add more details to life in the womb, how the baby experiences the world...although you are already doing a good job at this, you can still enhance and see what happens. A very strong foundation....
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Thanks Bob
The jury is out on this, needs some thought. It may be too long at the start.
The jury is out on this, needs some thought. It may be too long at the start.
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Bob is probably right about dropping the first two stanzas.
I shall probably adopt his suggestions.
I shall probably adopt his suggestions.
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