The Blue Booby

[BobBradshaw]

The Blue Booby


The males flash their most prized features
at the girls, baby blue feet.

Some of the boys whistle at the girls
as they walk by.

Others display their courage,
dive off the highest cliffs

blue sharp bills
torpedoing the water
for that darling over there.

But which suitor
will she choose?

Will it be the best whistler?
Or the one who can raise
his feet the highest?

So many things to consider
before a girl makes
the biggest decision of her life.

There's his pedigree,
his ability to bring home meals,

the future to work out. In the end
she loses her heart
over the beau
with the bluest
feet.

[FranktheFrank]

Otherwise very entertaining Bob, never heard of the blue footed booby before.

[Billy]

I like it Bob. I eliminated some words, otherwise I like the way it jokingly compares humans and Blue Boobies. I don't see it as anthropomorphizing. It's just the author playing with the idea. Maybe instead of pedigree you could list another attribute along with bringing home the food. Don't know much about Blue Boobies so can't give you any help on that.


The Blue Booby


The males flash their most prized features
at the girls, baby blue feet.

Some of the boys whistle at the girls
as they walk by.

Others display their courage,
dive off the highest cliffs

blue sharp bills
torpedoing the water
for that darling over there.

But which suitor
will she choose?

Will it be the best whistler?
Or the one who can raise
his feet the highest?

So many things to consider
before a girl makes
the biggest decision of her life.

There's his pedigree,
his ability to bring home meals,

the future to work out. In the end
she loses her heart
over the bachelor
with the bluest
feet.

[FranktheFrank]

I just think the Female/male would strengthen the anthropomorphism Bob, no offence, your choice.

The identity is strong enough and good enough without boys/girls.

[BobBradshaw]

Thanks, Frankly, Billy....Billy, I really like your edits...they clean up things nicely....I will use all of them. Thank you, Bob

[Michael (MV)]

 
Hi Bob,

this was on the Bing homepage Sunday:

https://www.bing.com/search?q=Blue-foot ... 12_0700%22


love the finale:

red heart and blue feet - red & blue create purple - Victory


consider beau for "bachelor"


. . . At last for ever last
she loses her heart
over the beau
with the bluest
feet.


. . . At last but not for least
she loses her heart
over the beau
with the bluest
feet.


^^ then "least" & "feet" kinda rhyme





Michael (MV)


 

 
 
  
 
 

[BobBradshaw]

Thanks, Michael. I like 'beau'....I'll use it...best, Bob