a passion triptych

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Michael (MV)
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a passion triptych

#1 Post by Michael (MV) » 16 Apr 2017, 13:29

 
 
TGiRF          into Your hands                       It is done
 
trees stand                          He is risen
 crucified                   so we need never lie again
upside down                   with heads in the sand
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 

Michael (MV)
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Re: TGIRF   (an Easter diptych)   "It is done"

#2 Post by Michael (MV) » 06 May 2017, 18:48

 
Hi CJ,

and Welcome to the Writer's BlocK



Thanks for reading & responding to the Easter Diptych

I have revised the East panel; and

I have modified the title - maybe there's too much title? - here is a diagram of those titular components:


                          an Easter diptych (title proper)


TGiRF (subtitle of the west panel)           "It is done" (subtitle of the East)



The "R" is for "Righteous" - a redemption of the term "good"

Thank God it's Righteous Friday


Our lives are not goods - good is for commodity

We are not commodity - we are Reality

Christ created our lives Right again - Righteous




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Michael (MV)

 

 

 

 

  
 
 
 

Michael (MV)
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Re: a passion triptych

#3 Post by Michael (MV) » 08 May 2017, 09:59

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TGiRF                                                "into Your hands . ."                            "It is done"

trees stand                                      what trees and dogs                           He is risen
crucified                                           have in common                                 so we need never 
upside down                                                                                                  lie again 
                                                          dying to live                                       up to here
Thank God                                                        
it's Righteous Friday                                 Voice
                                                          leaves bark behind

meenas17
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Re: a passion triptych

#4 Post by meenas17 » 09 May 2017, 16:39

Like the way, you handle this form.
This is new to me.
I have to learn a lot from you.
I write what comes to my mind.
I do not think of the forms and techniques.
Well, that is Meena.
meenas17

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