Defeated Ecology

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SOriz211
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Defeated Ecology

#1 Post by SOriz211 » 07 May 2017, 16:43

Defeated Ecology


A body wants to be sea
........and choose
shades of turquoise, of tempest,
of calm. A body wants to be tree,
have inhabited branches,
roots feeding off the ground,
............. and decide
modes of density, leaf shapes,
ways to burn.

How to explain
............. this era of dry seas
spitting dust, smoke, ashes
a peck of salt.

How to explain
acres of burned
stumps, droughts,
the collapse

of a drifting horizon.

SOriz211
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Re: Defeated Ecology

#2 Post by SOriz211 » 07 May 2017, 20:46

I thought of just putting "Defeated" as a title but it changes the intent of the poem, so I put it back in. Thank you
CJ


Sergio

meenas17
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Re: Defeated Ecology

#3 Post by meenas17 » 09 May 2017, 16:45

Can't be better put.
Well done.
meenas17

SOriz211
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Re: Defeated Ecology

#4 Post by SOriz211 » 09 May 2017, 18:45

Thank you Meena!

Sergio

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