Baby Shower

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BobBradshaw
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Baby Shower

#1 Post by BobBradshaw » 29 Jun 2017, 23:03

Baby Shower

   Wyatt, your beautiful wife Misty
    has grown!  She takes it in good humor:

    unable to see past her waist,
    her feet rumors,

    she drifts slowly
    above an oriental rug, trumpeter

    swans swimming in a lake
    of carpet below her, their long necks

    entwined like vines.  
    Bunches of papery flowers

    dangle from the ceiling,
    centering the room--as beautifully

    as your two lives will soon fill
    with your adorable
    Ashlyn.

Michael (MV)
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Re: Baby Shower

#2 Post by Michael (MV) » 29 Jun 2017, 23:34

 
Hi Bob,

Although this one didn't have the immediate engagement that I usually experience in your poems that I have read here;

this one did soon enough grow - come to term :)   maybe that's apropos for the circumstance of the pome.


I esp like how the interior design scape symbolically mirrors the generating family & child union: Wyatt, Misty & Ashlyn.

Somewhat, somehow, recalls to me another pregnancy metaphor: http://shenandoahliterary.org/blog/2012 ... via-plath/


the all-involving ever-evolution of life

8)

Michael (MV)

 
 
 
 
 
  
 
 
 

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