Years ago, is it not?
I retrospect.
Travel reverse.
Recall the events of my wedding.
It is a three-day affair
crowded with entertainment.
The customary rituals
share the prominence.
I, from the point of concentration,
watch the sequence in awe.
In the midst of the activities,
the dad shows an immaculate cordiality.
The mother expresses poise.
Her exhaustion is apparent.
Both stand on the porch,
greet people with a namaste
The guests enjoy the delicacies.
Rejoice the hospitality.
I find excitement in all,
driven by enthusiasm.
The ensemble disperses in spirit
Thoughts flood with pleasant memories.
Humanitarian
Re: Humanitarian
do you know sarah sloat? active in the ibpc forums before focusing elsewhere. the first verse of a poem of hers that i like very much. a trailing scent of your poem, the sadness.
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Re: Humanitarian
Humanitarianism depends on a view that every single person merit regard and respect and should be dealt with in that capacity. Therefore, humanitarians work towards advancing the well-being of Assignment Help UK humanity all in all. It is the absolute opposite of the "us versus them" attitude that characterizes tribalism and ethnic nationalism.
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SivaVelliangiri
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Re: Humanitarian
Humanitarism--boring title
Years ago, is it not?
I retrospect.
Travel reverse. --what does it mean
Recall the events of my wedding.
It is a three-day affair
crowded with entertainment.
The customary rituals
share the prominence.
I, from the, point of concentration [ point of concentration] a better way to say it
watch the sequence in awe.
In the midst of the activities,
the dad shows an immaculate cordiality. [the ] you don't need 'the'
The mother expresses poise.[The] Mother
Her exhaustion is apparent.
Both stand on the porch,
greet people with a namaste Namaste
The guests enjoy the delicacies.
Rejoice the hospitality.
I find excitement in all,
driven by enthusiasm. [driven by enthusiasm.] cliched
The ensemble disperses in spirit disperse[s]
Thoughts flood with pleasant memories. --show don't tell
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meenas17
Years ago, is it not?
I retrospect.
Travel reverse. --what does it mean
Recall the events of my wedding.
It is a three-day affair
crowded with entertainment.
The customary rituals
share the prominence.
I, from the, point of concentration [ point of concentration] a better way to say it
watch the sequence in awe.
In the midst of the activities,
the dad shows an immaculate cordiality. [the ] you don't need 'the'
The mother expresses poise.[The] Mother
Her exhaustion is apparent.
Both stand on the porch,
greet people with a namaste Namaste
The guests enjoy the delicacies.
Rejoice the hospitality.
I find excitement in all,
driven by enthusiasm. [driven by enthusiasm.] cliched
The ensemble disperses in spirit disperse[s]
Thoughts flood with pleasant memories. --show don't tell
_________________
meenas17
Re: Humanitarian
M---
i cannot resist the charm of this memory.
i've made very few edits....i want to preserve your voice.
Years ago, is it not?
I retrospect my wedding.
It is a three-day affair
crowded with entertainment.
The customary rituals
share the prominence.
I, from the point of concentration,
watch the sequence in awe.
In the midst of the activities,
the dad shows an immaculate cordiality.
The mother expresses poise.
Her exhaustion is apparent.
They stand on the porch,
greet people with a Namaste.
The guests enjoy the delicacies.
Rejoice the hospitality.
I find excitement in all,
driven by enthusiasm.
The ensemble disperses in spirit.
Thoughts flood with pleasant memories.
the end of the poem has a shy grace I admire. tell me more stories.
bernie
i cannot resist the charm of this memory.
i've made very few edits....i want to preserve your voice.
Years ago, is it not?
I retrospect my wedding.
It is a three-day affair
crowded with entertainment.
The customary rituals
share the prominence.
I, from the point of concentration,
watch the sequence in awe.
In the midst of the activities,
the dad shows an immaculate cordiality.
The mother expresses poise.
Her exhaustion is apparent.
They stand on the porch,
greet people with a Namaste.
The guests enjoy the delicacies.
Rejoice the hospitality.
I find excitement in all,
driven by enthusiasm.
The ensemble disperses in spirit.
Thoughts flood with pleasant memories.
the end of the poem has a shy grace I admire. tell me more stories.
bernie
Re: Humanitarian
Siva,
An analysis of the poem line by line.
Interesting insights. The start itself is impressive.
Humanitarian-- Boring Title.
Travel reverse a distorted phrase.
Should it be travel back?
Of course, the articles, definite articles are too many and should be avoided.
Noted.
The cliche and the overtellinng have to be pruned.
I will take care.
Thanks, Siva for the critique.
Wonderful job!.
Meena.
An analysis of the poem line by line.
Interesting insights. The start itself is impressive.
Humanitarian-- Boring Title.
Travel reverse a distorted phrase.
Should it be travel back?
Of course, the articles, definite articles are too many and should be avoided.
Noted.
The cliche and the overtellinng have to be pruned.
I will take care.
Thanks, Siva for the critique.
Wonderful job!.
Meena.
meenas17