Posey Heaven

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Bernie01
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Joined: 30 Jul 2015, 11:14

Posey Heaven

#1 Post by Bernie01 » 23 Jul 2017, 06:33

700 green stems
each with a round
white face the size
of a motionless
nickle surprised
by an unexpected
birthday party.

BobBradshaw
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Re: Posey Heaven

#2 Post by BobBradshaw » 24 Jul 2017, 20:58

This poem grows on you. At first I didn't find any emotions, just a descriptive scene....now it's a sweet, kind poem that surprises me at the end with its unexpected birthday party.

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