Gospel For Sons 13 and Over

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Kenneth2816
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Gospel For Sons 13 and Over

#1 Post by Kenneth2816 » 10 Aug 2017, 07:59

Only dirty girls do it, legs open
wide as the prophet's parted sea.

They'll suck you in, boy, just like Samson,
leave you chained to a pillar
with your eyes put out, you'll see.

They wipe their mouths with
the back of one hand and laugh.

The Devil drives a shiny red car, wears a, suit. Struts around here like he is somebody.

Never spent a day with his hands
IIn honest dirt.

Got a big glass eye always be watching
you. He'd take your soul but for Jesus.

'

And Jesus is the fire that lives
on the tongue of a black leather belt
coiled around the hand for effect.
'
For by his stripes we all are healed
women and children first.

Bernie01
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Re: Gospel For Sons 13 and Over

#2 Post by Bernie01 » 10 Aug 2017, 19:13

K---


The Devil drives a shiny red car,

show me that poem and you have my interest.


bernie

Kenneth2816
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Re: Gospel For Sons 13 and Over

#3 Post by Kenneth2816 » 10 Aug 2017, 22:51

Bernie. You write that one. You're the theologian:)

This is the one I wrote

FranktheFrank
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Re: Gospel For Sons 13 and Over

#4 Post by FranktheFrank » 12 Aug 2017, 13:55

Blasphemous.

If it was against Muslims they would send you a fatma by mail,

their daggers later.

Why to those in the West trample holiness in the dirt like swine.

If you want to write a sexual poem, why bring the Lord into it.

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Re: Gospel For Sons 13 and Over

#5 Post by Kenneth2816 » 12 Aug 2017, 15:27

Frank. I find your interpretation fascinating.
I don't think there is any blasphemy in poetry.

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Re: Gospel For Sons 13 and Over

#6 Post by Kenneth2816 » 12 Aug 2017, 16:16

Dear Frank. I perceive you to be a man of deeply held beliefs. That's great and I respect you for it.

Your religious views are inappropriate in this setting, especially when you insist on inflicting them on others.

I wouldn't come to your church and expect this poem to be well regarded. But I am at it at your church.

While we are at it, the poem is about the indoctrination of a young boy by a rigid father. The father sees the world much ad you do apparently, and reinforced this view with extreme corporal punishments in the name of the Lord.

I welcome all criticisms and commentary on the MERITS of the work.

We can have a theological discourse another time and another place, but not u det one of my poems.

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