Revisionist Lullaby For The Mad Girl

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Kenneth2816
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Revisionist Lullaby For The Mad Girl

#1 Post by Kenneth2816 » 16 Nov 2017, 09:34

In which Van Gogh painting with razors,
gives his ear to poor Ludwig,
coatless and mad
in the cold Vienna rain.

MC Escher's hand drawing a hand
drawing, completes the scherzo
of Schubert's "Unfinished Symphony"
in triple meter time.

The scissor-pincer hands
of Dali's melting clock cuts off
the tails of three blind nines,
they all become zeroes.

John Lennon's "Imagine"creates
some future where he's not cut
down by a deranged little man
with a copy of Catcher in the Rye.

Einstein unlocks some gap in
the space-time continuum so
I was there before you took a fist
of pills with names like Greek gods.

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Re: Revisionist Lullaby For The Mad Girl

#2 Post by Bernie01 » 17 Nov 2017, 22:10

Kenneth---

oh, i wish...i so wish the poem was built here:


I was there before you took a fist
of pills with names like Greek gods.



bernie

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Re: Revisionist Lullaby For The Mad Girl

#3 Post by Kenneth2816 » 17 Nov 2017, 23:08

Yeah idk.

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Re: Revisionist Lullaby For The Mad Girl

#4 Post by Gracy321 » 22 Nov 2017, 10:57

Love the way you've enchained all these famous artists in one poem.
Deftly strung together. Amazing.

I'm a bit in the dark on the last stanza:

Einstein unlocks some gap in
the space-time continuum so
I was there before you took a fist
of pills with names like Greek gods.


Don't "get" who took a fist of pills with names like Greek gods. And an N appears in this stanza, in first person.
Can you explain a little? I'm flummoxed here... my bad. :|

Enjoyed all the same.

Best, Gracy

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Re: Revisionist Lullaby For The Mad Girl

#5 Post by Kenneth2816 » 22 Nov 2017, 17:21

Gracy. The ending could be anyone
But it was someone close to N who
committed suicide. N wishes to have been able to prevent it. Sorry to be so blunt.No other way to explain though.

Thank you for reading and commenting

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Re: Revisionist Lullaby For The Mad Girl

#6 Post by SivaVelliangiri » 22 Nov 2017, 20:40

Kenneth

I could get it. Names like Greek Gods. We used to sign our creative letter writing with names like Codopirina and Mr.Eldopar. Aspirina. Even our Auyurvedic names became feminine. That aside the artists are well accounted for. Einstein alone perplexes,maybe because of his theory. That it is suicide is evident in the 'fist of pills.' I like the title best.

S

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Re: Revisionist Lullaby For The Mad Girl

#7 Post by Kenneth2816 » 22 Nov 2017, 21:06

Siva...good comments. Thank you...
Lol at Aspirina

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Re: Revisionist Lullaby For The Mad Girl

#8 Post by Bernie01 » 23 Nov 2017, 06:17

Kenneth---


i liked so much that "fist full of pills with names like Greek Gods"---i did not see that as suicide, but like so often here in california a still used term for mind expansion through creative chemistry.

prescribed drugs, but substances that often rocket the user to marginal states of health.

and I too enjoyed this rich caldron of names and ideas. adds excitement, intellectual compression.

great job.


bernie

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Re: Revisionist Lullaby For The Mad Girl

#9 Post by Kenneth2816 » 23 Nov 2017, 06:54

Thank you, Bernie. My wife suffered severe PTSD from multiple traumas. She did all she could.
After four years, Im just now able to write about it.

Im fine. I've made my peace

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