Those around me
behave impeccable
flattered, I
lose my feet.
This could be
in front of me , extend
a smile and a bow
an accomplished acting.
Impressed by their charm
I stay happy,
assume I am
great and terrific.
I do not believe them,
profess to do so
play the fool with discretion
a strategem I only know.
The Two Way Traffic
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Re: The Two Way Traffic
I like this very much,
a clever metaphor regarding poetry forums.
Very honest too, N is preoccupied with the truth,
accepts accolades, but a sliver of doubt remains,
N plays the game, the truth will emerge in time.
What N doesn't realise, she doesn't say,
is that as time progresses N's writing will
also grow stronger and so will N's confidence.
a clever metaphor regarding poetry forums.
Very honest too, N is preoccupied with the truth,
accepts accolades, but a sliver of doubt remains,
N plays the game, the truth will emerge in time.
What N doesn't realise, she doesn't say,
is that as time progresses N's writing will
also grow stronger and so will N's confidence.
Re: The Two Way Traffic
M---
one of your best i think.
because the logic is complex and requires the reader to understand the poet's intention.
here, for example:
...extend
a smile and a bow
an accomplished acting.
Impressed by their charm
I stay happy,
and especially here:
...assume I am
great and terrific.
and this solid, unexpected conclusion:
I do not believe them,
profess to do so
play the fool with discretion
a strategem I only know.
the poem works very well and identifies poem elements you can build on.
bernie
one of your best i think.
because the logic is complex and requires the reader to understand the poet's intention.
here, for example:
...extend
a smile and a bow
an accomplished acting.
Impressed by their charm
I stay happy,
and especially here:
...assume I am
great and terrific.
and this solid, unexpected conclusion:
I do not believe them,
profess to do so
play the fool with discretion
a strategem I only know.
the poem works very well and identifies poem elements you can build on.
bernie
Re: The Two Way Traffic
Thanks, Frank.
The thought came to my mind as I sat to write something else.
it has come out well. Happy to know you like it.
The thought came to my mind as I sat to write something else.
it has come out well. Happy to know you like it.
meenas17
Re: The Two Way Traffic
I was about to write about something totally unrelated.
This one took me unaware.
it is a simple poem.
Happy to read your comment.
Thanks, Bernie.
This one took me unaware.
it is a simple poem.
Happy to read your comment.
Thanks, Bernie.
meenas17