Shelley's Heart
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Shelley's Heart
v2:
Shelley's Heart
Your mother, Mary, was ill, but desperate
to find her husband, who was late
returning home to Lerici,
when she heard the news:
Percy had been hastily buried
in the sands of Viareggio.
Young Percy, you would have been appalled
to see your father's body - falling
apart - when dug up a month later
by his friends.
They lifted him onto a pyre
on the beach, and set him ablaze.
His bones crumbled into a white ash,
but his carbonized heart
would not burn.
You would have grieved
to hear Hunt's shameful refusal
at first to return the heart to your mother,
who was inconsolable.
She carried it for years, swaddled
in silks, wherever she went.
It was found at her death
in her beloved writing desk.
She had been determined
to keep your father close,
to never allow him
out of her reach
again.
v1:
Shelley's Heart
Your mother, Mary, was ill, but desperate
to find Percy, who was late
returning home to Lerici,
when she heard the news:
Percy had been hastily buried
in the sands of Viareggio.
You would have been shocked
to see your father's body, falling apart,
when dug up a month later
by his friends.
They lifted him onto a pyre
on the beach, and set him ablaze.
His bones crumbled into a white ash,
but his carbonized heart
would not burn.
You would have grieved
to hear Hunt's shameful refusal
at first to return the heart to your mother,
who was inconsolable.
She carried it for years, wrapped
in silks, wherever she went.
It was found at her death
in her beloved writing desk.
She had been determined
to keep your father close,
to never allow him
out of her reach
again.
Shelley's Heart
Your mother, Mary, was ill, but desperate
to find her husband, who was late
returning home to Lerici,
when she heard the news:
Percy had been hastily buried
in the sands of Viareggio.
Young Percy, you would have been appalled
to see your father's body - falling
apart - when dug up a month later
by his friends.
They lifted him onto a pyre
on the beach, and set him ablaze.
His bones crumbled into a white ash,
but his carbonized heart
would not burn.
You would have grieved
to hear Hunt's shameful refusal
at first to return the heart to your mother,
who was inconsolable.
She carried it for years, swaddled
in silks, wherever she went.
It was found at her death
in her beloved writing desk.
She had been determined
to keep your father close,
to never allow him
out of her reach
again.
v1:
Shelley's Heart
Your mother, Mary, was ill, but desperate
to find Percy, who was late
returning home to Lerici,
when she heard the news:
Percy had been hastily buried
in the sands of Viareggio.
You would have been shocked
to see your father's body, falling apart,
when dug up a month later
by his friends.
They lifted him onto a pyre
on the beach, and set him ablaze.
His bones crumbled into a white ash,
but his carbonized heart
would not burn.
You would have grieved
to hear Hunt's shameful refusal
at first to return the heart to your mother,
who was inconsolable.
She carried it for years, wrapped
in silks, wherever she went.
It was found at her death
in her beloved writing desk.
She had been determined
to keep your father close,
to never allow him
out of her reach
again.
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Re: Shelley's Heart
Hi Bob,
I can't linger now; but hope to soon, b/c this letter-poem mult-appeals to me.
Is it available to represent the Writer's Block in the upcoming May IBPC 2018.
I hope so.
Thanks, Bob
Michael (MV)
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Re: Shelley's Heart
Thank you, Michael...I’m glad you like it, and yes, it’s available... thank you for considering it
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Re: Shelley's Heart
I nominate this poem of Bob's
for the May IBPC.
for the May IBPC.
Re: Shelley's Heart
Great poem Bob, love the surreal twist in an otherwise normal story. I will give it a second for IBPC.
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Frank, Dale... thanks... I appreciate it
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Shelley's Heart...
a third nom from me....loved the ending. the narrative flow handles a lot of detail, but does so smoothly and without interrupting the building mood.
very very nice.
bernie
a third nom from me....loved the ending. the narrative flow handles a lot of detail, but does so smoothly and without interrupting the building mood.
very very nice.
bernie
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Re: Shelley's Heart
Hi Bob
comments, and unconditional workshop share:
in lieu of "Percy" in stanza 1:
Your mother, Mary, was ill, but desperate
to find her husband, who was late
returning home to Lerici,
re:
"Percy had been hastily buried
in the sands of Viareggio."
^^ his poem "Ozymandias" resonates:
" . . Round the decay
Of that colossal wreck, boundless and bare
The lone and level sands stretch far away"
^^ most esp that last line
Assuming the speaker is addressing Sir Percy Florence Shelley, the only surviving child, I'm suggesting personalizing; and appalled for "shocked";
and others, illustrated within, which are prompted by "gothic" responses (literary & nonfictional) to the passing of the loved one:
Young Percy, you would have been appalled
to see your father's body - falling
apart - when dug up a month
later by his friends, who lifted
the reposed upon a beach pyre, yet to witness
the poet's remains light up the night.
His bones cremated to a white ash,
but his lionized heart, resisting
to burn, carbonized instead.
Percy, you would have felt disheartened
to hear Hunt's shameful hesitation
to return the heart home.
And even then, your mother continued inconsolable.
The wife still carrying her husband's heart,
swadded in silks, wherever she went.
At her death, the relic was found
safe within her writing desk,
like a ring with the unwritten vow:
two keeping
in rhythm as one
forevermore
^^ Yes, an allusion to Poe and "Annabel Lee" from the other side of the Atlantic:
But our love it was stronger by far than the love
Of those who were older than we--
Of many far wiser than we--
And neither the angels in heaven above,
Nor the demons down under the sea,
Can ever dissever my soul from the soul
Of the beautiful Annabel Lee
^^ trans-Atlantic & Universal - the Heart is not earthbound
Thanks, Bob, this poem was a wonderful experience, from the Heart with Lit
Mr. & Mrs. Shelley are liking it too (and "Thank You" too)
In heaven there is no tense
just Present
Ask Brother Percy, I believe he knows
Michael (MV)
BobBradshaw wrote:Shelley's Heart
Your mother, Mary, was ill, but desperate
to find Percy, who was late
returning home to Lerici,
when she heard the news:
Percy had been hastily buried
in the sands of Viareggio.
You would have been shocked
to see your father's body, falling apart,
when dug up a month later
by his friends.
They lifted him onto a pyre
on the beach, and set him ablaze.
His bones crumbled into a white ash,
but his carbonized heart
would not burn.
You would have grieved
to hear Hunt's shameful refusal
at first to return the heart to your mother,
who was inconsolable.
She carried it for years, wrapped
in silks, wherever she went.
It was found at her death
in her beloved writing desk.
She had been determined
to keep your father close,
to never allow him
out of her reach
again.
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Re: Shelley's Heart
Thanks very much, Michael, for your ideas. I have incorporated some of the suggestions into the latest version. Best, Bob
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Re: Shelley's Heart
No long dead artist, musician, writer
is not softened at your hand.
I've said before, a book of all these
would be one I would buy
is not softened at your hand.
I've said before, a book of all these
would be one I would buy
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Re: Shelley's Heart
Thanks, Kenneth... appreciate it