Goldenrod

[BobBradshaw]

Goldenrod


They wave from the roadside,
like school girls waving rags
at passing vehicles, a car wash sale
to raise money
for a Pasadena float. They are golden
like our daughters.

My ten year old throws
her arms around me, her braces
glinting as she smiles.
"Can I sleep over at Maggie's?"

For now I'm thankful
she is as girlish
as tonight's moon--
in her lemony dress--
with no thought
of boys.

Yet I can never stop
the joys and heartbreaks
of boyfriends
--still years away,
their approach
like long-haired
comets.

[IndianaDP]

I like the idea here, the title doing so much.

I would say,
They wave from the side of the road. Cut ‘at us’

Also perhaps- Pasadena float, instead of float in Pasadena.

[FranktheFrank]

Agree with Dale about 'at us'.

Maybe 'glint as she smiles'.

Love the last line, They approach [silently]
like long haired comets
[foretastes of doom].

[BobBradshaw]

Thanks, Dale...I like the suggestions....and Frank, thx for confirming....Bob