a photojournalism:

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Michael (MV)
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a photojournalism:

#1 Post by Michael (MV) » 24 Jun 2018, 01:38

                                                                                                                                                                                                                  Life exhumed with the Light

                                  flat lines aren't finish lines                                                    

                                                                                                        buried alive in the body bag of a serpent's belly

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Re: a photojournalism:

#2 Post by Bernie01 » 24 Jun 2018, 03:59


kill the last line---no connection to light and it's a poor man dylan thomas...

but the first two lines, now we got something going.

consider making a passing reference to antiquity...challenge yourself...write five more lines....


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