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FranktheFrank
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Removed for publishing

#1 Post by FranktheFrank » 25 Jun 2018, 14:47

Dylan Thomas poem

Bernie01
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Re: Tribute in a Wooden Shed

#2 Post by Bernie01 » 25 Jun 2018, 21:42

Frank---

excellent.

A warmer and more balanced portrait.


now this shed, you don't make it come alive by telling us what poems may have been crafted there.

would avoid the word wanton at the end.


makes the poem sound parochial.



bernie

FranktheFrank
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Re: Tribute in a Wooden Shed

#3 Post by FranktheFrank » 25 Jun 2018, 22:24

Okay
shall try more
drop wanton
Thanks

FranktheFrank
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Re: Removed for publishing

#4 Post by FranktheFrank » 19 Dec 2023, 15:23

This Poem will be published in March 2024

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