Andal's Love

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meenas17
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Andal's Love

#1 Post by meenas17 » 20 Jul 2018, 20:09

It is love anyway
dissimilar  to that of man and woman
different from mother and child
unlike the one between the siblings.

It is a liking anyhow.
Strange conjugation
one might not understand
being a human after all.

It is one of platonic.
Inconceivable to most
that of sublime ecstasy
purity in thought as well.

I speak of the fervour
professed by Andal.
A girl found in the Tulsivan. 
Sings the praise of Lord Vishnu.

She wears the garland of Vishnu.
Overwhelmed she dances
Passionate. Minds not her
father's admonition.

 Runs to the sanctum,
where she merges with the Almighty.
Love. One of poetic .
None can define nor translate.

Animates.
meenas17

Kenneth2816
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Re: Andal's Love

#2 Post by Kenneth2816 » 20 Jul 2018, 20:37

This is really beautiful meenas

meenas17
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Re: Andal's Love

#3 Post by meenas17 » 20 Jul 2018, 20:46

Thanks, Kenneth.
Your appreciation helps.
meenas17

FranktheFrank
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Re: Andal's Love

#4 Post by FranktheFrank » 23 Jul 2018, 01:43

You are finding confidence in your writing Meena,
finding your voice.
You always thank people for their input,
such politeness,
I like that.

SivaRamanathan
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Re: Andal's Love

#5 Post by SivaRamanathan » 24 Jul 2018, 06:02

Meena

This reads like a statement.Please,please find some way of bringing out the true fervour of Aandal's love.I want to see this poem work. Be Aandal.

S


Michael (MV)
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Re: Andal's Love

#7 Post by Michael (MV) » 24 Jul 2018, 20:28

Hi meenas17,

in accord w/ Siva

not a telling; a Revelation

looking for the experience that will lead to the Revelation


Have you ever read or heard of the myth Leda and the Swan - the interaction between a human and a divinity;

and also there's Richard Crashaw's poem, "The Flaming Heart," after Bernini's "The Ecstasy of St. Theresa"



8)

Michael


SivaRamanathan wrote:Meena

This reads like a statement.Please,please find some way of bringing out the true fervour of Aandal's love.I want to see this poem work. Be Aandal.

S

SivaRamanathan
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Re: Andal's Love

#8 Post by SivaRamanathan » 25 Jul 2018, 00:00

Thank you Michael.I have heard of but not read these .So I will come back after reading .

S

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