It was hot that day on the cattle station,
shadows were getting longer.
She'd wandered off from the bar-b-que,
I followed her scent and tucked her under a fold
in the rock. She'd toddled up a hill two miles away.
I kept her warm throughout the night.
I heard calling at sun-up, boss was looking
for her, Aurora began to cry.
Got a steak that night, good dog.
Max the Queensland Cattle Dog
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Re: Max the Queensland Cattle Dog
Who is Aurora? Now that I know who Aurora is, through Ken, I find this piece touching...maybe you could identify who Aurora is though...I thought someone was looking for a dog, not the other way around when I first read this....maybe change the title to identify the girl....e.g., Max the Queensland Cattle Dog Saves Aurora....?
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Re: Max the Queensland Cattle Dog
Aurora was the little girl who wandered off, I think. I recall several news articles about dogs saving children by keeping them warm, etc.
I think hearimg from the dog is very original and imaginative
I think hearimg from the dog is very original and imaginative
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Good to know, Kenneth...that changes everything....Sorry, Frank....didn't know the background....I think now you just need to find an ending that works....the poem works except for that last line....
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Re: Max the Queensland Cattle Dog
Maybe if I change that last line to:
Got a steak last night for being a good dog.
I see it's easy to get confused torn between putting a cutting
from the newspaper article as an epitaph, or including more information.
Maybe if I put: Boss' toddler wandered off . . . in L3.
Thanks for feedback, it's nice to know what the reader is thinking.
Got a steak last night for being a good dog.
I see it's easy to get confused torn between putting a cutting
from the newspaper article as an epitaph, or including more information.
Maybe if I put: Boss' toddler wandered off . . . in L3.
Thanks for feedback, it's nice to know what the reader is thinking.
Re: Max the Queensland Cattle Dog
Not expecting the dog to be the narrator, interesting perspective, nicely done.