a first draft after reading Bob's ode to ties
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a first draft after reading Bob's ode to ties
"Sorcerer of the Moon"
on earth as it is in Heaven -- The Our Father (of course)
and deliver us from evil
(and notice the socially polite "please" isn't even required
He's already left the fold to save each & every one)
since e v I l is l I v e bent backwards
and His will is the living will
straightening things out forever
for ties are as sinuous as original sin
I can't recall the last time I'd worn one
was rather skillful in tying the knot
all good things must end
for the righteousness to begin
then it was just like that warm white wind
we all long to belong to
when the Savior appeared to power-lift the latches
off this apprentice-prince of nothing
showing me the Houdini slip from the fabricated
déjà vu like promised manna
my life unknotted
out of the iron maiden
then I too evolved creatively endowed
leaving the ties hanging in the closet along with the belts on the rack
the remains of restraints left behind in the dungeon
dry-rotting like buried mummies
while I
a brother son
re-created for outside
the box not
to tie the knot
I my mother's heart ranging
not with rings around the collar
I my mother's heart will follow
running free of cycles
with anima in UniSon
on a sunny-moon
Ruth's son-songs
murmuring outside her body
we continue on from earth untied
and to Thy kingdom AoA
Alive on Arrival
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Re: a first draft after reading Bob's ode to ties
I like this, especially these lines:
I can't recall the last time I worn one
was rather skillful in tying the knot
then the Savior illuminated this apprentice-prince
with the Houdini slip
my life unknotted
then I became also creatively endowed
I can't recall the last time I worn one
was rather skillful in tying the knot
then the Savior illuminated this apprentice-prince
with the Houdini slip
my life unknotted
then I became also creatively endowed
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Re: a first draft after reading Bob's ode to ties
Thanks Bob,
for your read & comment
I have actually edited since your visit
hopefully evolved the original draft in the right direction
Michael (MV)
BobBradshaw wrote: ↑06 Sep 2018, 06:55I like this, especially these lines:
I can't recall the last time I worn one
was rather skillful in tying the knot
then the Savior illuminated this apprentice-prince
with the Houdini slip
my life unknotted
then I became also creatively endowed
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Re: a first draft after reading Bob's ode to ties
Very deep poem Michael.
and: the last time I wore a tie
or
the last time I'd worn a tie.
Skillful for American and skilful for British spelling.I can't recall the last time I worn one
was rather skillful in tying the knot
and: the last time I wore a tie
or
the last time I'd worn a tie.