Running on the Spectrum (revised first 3 stanzas)
Posted: 02 Oct 2018, 03:08
I've given this a makeover - to make some parts clearer and make it less of a 'report'
Revision 2
Running on the Spectrum
Jason Bounces like a klipspringer,
hooting at Dad until the starter
twirls his chequered flag.
Racers zoom off, chased by
fun-runners, fancy dressers.
Jason joins the challenged,
plodding at the rear – soon darts
off track, Dad in pursuit,
coaxing - but Jason dashes
towards zebra rushes and bog plants,
kneels to splosh, making ripples,
his giggles scattering the geese.
A chocolate cookie entices - he charges,
snatches, pushing a fellow rambler
- a seven foot giraffe!
Jason gobbles the treat; Dad reaches
to steady the long neck as it wobbles,
cajoles his teen to re-join the race.
Time to stop for a breather -
Jason and Dad flop onto the grass
for a picnic; ham baps, orange juice.
Up they jump, Dad flapping at wasps;
Jason, now humming, strides on -
five miles to the end.
Surging from spectators, Miss Castle
collides with a giant chicken to
beam at her former pupil.
Well done!
Mum waits at the finish,
tumble drier for a stomach,
strains for a glimpse -
hears the tannoy announce him.
The Group catch it too
and in their tsunami
of whoops and cheers, Jason
leaps, while Mom’s heart skips
like a klipspringer.
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Stanzas 1-3 were:
Bouncing like a klipspringer
Jason beside Dad, waits
for the flag to descend with a twirl.
Racers zoom off, faces determined,
pursued by joggers, costumed for fun.
Jason merges with challenged
walkers at the rear, but speeds up
veering off track - woods nearby.
Dad keeps pace - yet Jason dashes
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Revision 1
Jason bounces like a klipspringer, Dad nearby.
Everyone is waiting, he cannot fathom this outing.
The flag descends; serious racers sprint off, pursued by
costumed super heroes, clowns. Jason joins the challenged
walkers at the rear. He can speed, wants to leave all behind,
including Dad, but could run off-track, woods nearby.
Through Sutton Park past Black Pool, Dad points to ducks
dawdling among Zebra rushes and bog plants.
Klipspringer returns with a shout, grabs a fellow rambler.
Dad’s words soothe, calm the commotion. They stop
for a breather - flop on the grass verge for a picnic;
ham baps and orange’s juice -not overstuffed they continue.
Surging from the crowd, Miss Castle collides with a giant
chicken, unruffled she beams at her former pupil. Well done!
Mum waits at the finish, tumble drier for a stomach, strains
for a glimpse-hears the tannoy announce him.
The Group catch it too and in their tsunami of whoops and cheers,
Mum’s heartbeat leaps with klipspringer’s excitement.
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Running on the Spectrum
Morning sun compliments his school
t-shirt as restlessly
he jumps, legs like springs.
Serious racers sprint off, followed
by fun-runners, costumed super-heroes
or clowns. Jason joins the concluding strollers.
He could speed, leaving everyone behind,
but might stray off track – lose his Dad.
The challenge is to follow a ten-mile route.
The flag descends with a flourish, they head
towards Sutton Park, past the lake, ducks
dawdling among zebra rushes and bog plants.
Half way they stop, flop on the turf. Dad
unpacks a picnic, ham baps and orange juice
- sustained they continue.
Out of the crowds, Miss Castle dashes, colliding
with a giant chicken; she beams at her former pupil
Well done Jason for taking part
Waiting at the finish, my stomach churns like
a tumble drier, then I hear from the tannoy;
Jason Needham, Kingstanding Special School.
There is a tsumani of whoops and clapping
from the Disabled Olympics Group
Jason’s excitement like a lit firecracker
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Edits:
Last line was:
and his excitement leaps to my heartbeat.
1st stanza was:
Morning sun compliments his school
t-shirt as he jumps, legs like springs,
impatient to begin.
Initially missed from St2
Revision 2
Running on the Spectrum
Jason Bounces like a klipspringer,
hooting at Dad until the starter
twirls his chequered flag.
Racers zoom off, chased by
fun-runners, fancy dressers.
Jason joins the challenged,
plodding at the rear – soon darts
off track, Dad in pursuit,
coaxing - but Jason dashes
towards zebra rushes and bog plants,
kneels to splosh, making ripples,
his giggles scattering the geese.
A chocolate cookie entices - he charges,
snatches, pushing a fellow rambler
- a seven foot giraffe!
Jason gobbles the treat; Dad reaches
to steady the long neck as it wobbles,
cajoles his teen to re-join the race.
Time to stop for a breather -
Jason and Dad flop onto the grass
for a picnic; ham baps, orange juice.
Up they jump, Dad flapping at wasps;
Jason, now humming, strides on -
five miles to the end.
Surging from spectators, Miss Castle
collides with a giant chicken to
beam at her former pupil.
Well done!
Mum waits at the finish,
tumble drier for a stomach,
strains for a glimpse -
hears the tannoy announce him.
The Group catch it too
and in their tsunami
of whoops and cheers, Jason
leaps, while Mom’s heart skips
like a klipspringer.
--------------------------------------------------------
Stanzas 1-3 were:
Bouncing like a klipspringer
Jason beside Dad, waits
for the flag to descend with a twirl.
Racers zoom off, faces determined,
pursued by joggers, costumed for fun.
Jason merges with challenged
walkers at the rear, but speeds up
veering off track - woods nearby.
Dad keeps pace - yet Jason dashes
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Revision 1
Jason bounces like a klipspringer, Dad nearby.
Everyone is waiting, he cannot fathom this outing.
The flag descends; serious racers sprint off, pursued by
costumed super heroes, clowns. Jason joins the challenged
walkers at the rear. He can speed, wants to leave all behind,
including Dad, but could run off-track, woods nearby.
Through Sutton Park past Black Pool, Dad points to ducks
dawdling among Zebra rushes and bog plants.
Klipspringer returns with a shout, grabs a fellow rambler.
Dad’s words soothe, calm the commotion. They stop
for a breather - flop on the grass verge for a picnic;
ham baps and orange’s juice -not overstuffed they continue.
Surging from the crowd, Miss Castle collides with a giant
chicken, unruffled she beams at her former pupil. Well done!
Mum waits at the finish, tumble drier for a stomach, strains
for a glimpse-hears the tannoy announce him.
The Group catch it too and in their tsunami of whoops and cheers,
Mum’s heartbeat leaps with klipspringer’s excitement.
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Running on the Spectrum
Morning sun compliments his school
t-shirt as restlessly
he jumps, legs like springs.
Serious racers sprint off, followed
by fun-runners, costumed super-heroes
or clowns. Jason joins the concluding strollers.
He could speed, leaving everyone behind,
but might stray off track – lose his Dad.
The challenge is to follow a ten-mile route.
The flag descends with a flourish, they head
towards Sutton Park, past the lake, ducks
dawdling among zebra rushes and bog plants.
Half way they stop, flop on the turf. Dad
unpacks a picnic, ham baps and orange juice
- sustained they continue.
Out of the crowds, Miss Castle dashes, colliding
with a giant chicken; she beams at her former pupil
Well done Jason for taking part
Waiting at the finish, my stomach churns like
a tumble drier, then I hear from the tannoy;
Jason Needham, Kingstanding Special School.
There is a tsumani of whoops and clapping
from the Disabled Olympics Group
Jason’s excitement like a lit firecracker
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Edits:
Last line was:
and his excitement leaps to my heartbeat.
1st stanza was:
Morning sun compliments his school
t-shirt as he jumps, legs like springs,
impatient to begin.
Initially missed from St2