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BobBradshaw
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Re: The Patch Over

#2 Post by BobBradshaw » 11 Oct 2018, 03:34

Excellent poem...you immerse us into another world, and it all seems authentic....
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Re: The Patch Over

#3 Post by Billy » 11 Oct 2018, 05:09

Good poem. Sounds like the real stuff. Like the final line, it almost makes them lovable.
In my poem, the character shows a little humanity when he realizes he's probably not the greatest father and the kids are probably better off.
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Re: The Patch Over

#4 Post by Kenneth2816 » 11 Oct 2018, 06:10

Agree Billy.
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