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Billy
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#1 Post by Billy » 11 Oct 2018, 05:12

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the kind old lady
talking to herself
rolled up nylons
sagging around her ankles
the grocery cart
a Rolls Royce of carts
living on wheels
a tour of the city
all the less popular spots
friends with prime property
overlooking the river
eccentric homes
nothing fancy
what they lack in space
they make up for
with warmth and privacy
out of the rain
until they become too soggy
fall down
there's always another box
another hideaway
where only the milieu
may look
otherwise no one
comes looking
for what they don't
want to find

BobBradshaw
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#2 Post by BobBradshaw » 11 Oct 2018, 06:55

nice, unpretentious poem...some of many good lines:

there's always another box
another hideaway
where only the milieu
may look

Kenneth2816
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#3 Post by Kenneth2816 » 11 Oct 2018, 09:55

Nicely handled. Not soppy or pontifical

IndianaDP
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#4 Post by IndianaDP » 11 Oct 2018, 18:43

Nicely done, I like that she seems to have a positive outlook despite her circumstances.

Michael (MV)
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#5 Post by Michael (MV) » 12 Oct 2018, 03:52

 
Hi Billy, a familiar WB & IBPC poet

good to see your presence in poetry here


my fav:

"eccentric homes
nothing fancy
what they lack in space
they make up for
with warmth and privacy"

and

"where only the milieu
may look
otherwise no one
comes looking
for what they don't
want to find"



also, interesting the title

the wizard of was



8)

Michael (MV)

 

 


 
 
 
 
 
 

SivaRamanathan
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#6 Post by SivaRamanathan » 12 Oct 2018, 06:07

Your first line says it all. I like the shape of the poem.

S

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#7 Post by Billy » 13 Oct 2018, 22:51

Thanks Michael and Siva

Yes, Michael, the title lends itself to several meanings.

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