Cuddles And Giggles
Cuddles And Giggles
The little one
my grand daughter
ever affectionate
looks at me
with no sign of recognition.
The day before
we played together
she hiding, I seeking,
leaving no corner of the house
everything being forgotten.
I go close to her
she runs away terrified.
Call her “Meenu”. She
being named after me.
Hostile she turns..
This being in a wedding,
amongst relatives and friends.
They look at me
as though I am an unkind grandma
Wriggle with discomfort.
I stay put in my place
bite my tongue
brush aside the tears
watch the ceremonies
with little.interest.
I walk towards the exit
hurt and sad, a tiny hand pulls
the edges of my sari.
find my lovely child,
who cuddles and giggles.
my grand daughter
ever affectionate
looks at me
with no sign of recognition.
The day before
we played together
she hiding, I seeking,
leaving no corner of the house
everything being forgotten.
I go close to her
she runs away terrified.
Call her “Meenu”. She
being named after me.
Hostile she turns..
This being in a wedding,
amongst relatives and friends.
They look at me
as though I am an unkind grandma
Wriggle with discomfort.
I stay put in my place
bite my tongue
brush aside the tears
watch the ceremonies
with little.interest.
I walk towards the exit
hurt and sad, a tiny hand pulls
the edges of my sari.
find my lovely child,
who cuddles and giggles.
meenas17
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Re: Cuddles And Giggles
Being teased, so cruel Meena, yet love abides.
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Re: Cuddles And Giggles
Meena, I really relate and like the opening....it grabs me....too much telling follows, but these lines are excellent:
The little one
my grand daughter
ever affectionate
looks at me
with no sign of recognition.
The day before
we played together
she hiding, I seeking,
leaving no corner of the house
everything being forgotten.
I go close to her
she runs away terrified.
The little one
my grand daughter
ever affectionate
looks at me
with no sign of recognition.
The day before
we played together
she hiding, I seeking,
leaving no corner of the house
everything being forgotten.
I go close to her
she runs away terrified.
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Re: Cuddles And Giggles
Maybe just trimming would help...
The little one
my grand daughter
ever affectionate
looks at me
with no sign of recognition.
The day before
we played hide and seek,
leaving no corner of the house
unexplored.
Now I go close to her
she runs away terrified...
This being a wedding,
relatives and friends
look at me
as though I am an unkind grandma.
I stay put in my place
bite my tongue,
brush aside the tears,
watch the ceremonies
with little interest.
I walk towards the exit
hurt and sad—a tiny hand tugs
at the edges of my sari,
and my heart
The little one
my grand daughter
ever affectionate
looks at me
with no sign of recognition.
The day before
we played hide and seek,
leaving no corner of the house
unexplored.
Now I go close to her
she runs away terrified...
This being a wedding,
relatives and friends
look at me
as though I am an unkind grandma.
I stay put in my place
bite my tongue,
brush aside the tears,
watch the ceremonies
with little interest.
I walk towards the exit
hurt and sad—a tiny hand tugs
at the edges of my sari,
and my heart
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Re: Cuddles And Giggles
I quite like Bob's edit, Meena.