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Vivid in memory
Muni pinches me
through the day,
while in Kindergarten.

She has sharp nails,
plunges them into the skin
till my arm turns red.
Excruciating.

My eyes glisten with tears.
Callous, shows
her incisive nails with pride.
Quieter I become.

I do not complain
nor warn her, out of fear.
Mysterious of her. Stops,
pinches no more,

Muni takes to medicine,
injects and dissects with precision
an extension of pinching.
I presume.

A leading surgeon in town-
Muni,- a celebrity. Practises
amidst fanfare and applause.
I admire her in silence.

Oh this is good! One of your best... the unusual Muni character is intriguing... terrific writing

Thanks Bob.

Intriguing
is the word. Nice .

Thanks, Frank.

A Fascinating poem, Meena!

Vivid in memory
Muni pinches me
through the day,
while in Kindergarten.

A vivid memory indeed

She has sharp nails,
plunges them into the skin
till my arm turns red.
Excruciating.

My eyes glisten with tears.
Callous, shows
her incisive nails with pride.
Quieter I become.

I do not complain
nor warn her, out of fear.
Mysterious of her. Stops,
pinches no more,

Perhaps -

Mysteriously, she stops,
pinches no more

Muni takes to medicine,
injects and dissects with precision
an extension of pinching.
I presume.

A leading surgeon in town-
Muni,- a celebrity. Practises
amidst fanfare and applause.
I admire her in silence.

Quite an unexpected ending and a very original poem. Meena

Eira

Thanks Eira for your edits.
Appreciate your comment.

Suggested edits

throughout the day s1

into my skin s2

she shows s3

mysteriously she stop pinching,
no more pain. s4

Your writing is growing keep going.
best wishes.

Your encouragement sustains.
Thanks for the suggestions.