i bring you tonight
i bring you tonight
i bring you tonight
soft animals
from the heart of this beast
i know you don't agree
the secret is still a secret
the borders are fraudulent
the compass i keep
in my pocket spins
from the center
of my conscience
wherever i turn
the sacraments spoil
the water turns to sand
even if i stand in one place
the ground moves
under my spell
the wind whistles my name
from the far corners
of the last plea for forgiveness
soft animals
from the heart of this beast
i know you don't agree
the secret is still a secret
the borders are fraudulent
the compass i keep
in my pocket spins
from the center
of my conscience
wherever i turn
the sacraments spoil
the water turns to sand
even if i stand in one place
the ground moves
under my spell
the wind whistles my name
from the far corners
of the last plea for forgiveness
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Re: i bring you tonight
I love this plea for forgiveness. I like the unusual imagery, as in the lines below....I would put the compass somewhere else than in the pants....a shirt pocket perhaps...some of us are incorrigible
the sacraments spoil
the water turns to sand
even if i stand in one place
the ground moves
under my spell
the sacraments spoil
the water turns to sand
even if i stand in one place
the ground moves
under my spell
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Re: i bring you tonight
Agree, pants was something I noticed, pocket would do.
Re: i bring you tonight
Well, I wasn't sure about pants either when it came out but I feel it's important to the plea for forgiveness.
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Re: i bring you tonight
Hi Billy,
workshop-share as:
the secret is still a secret
the borders are fraudulent
the compass i keep
in my pocket spins
from the center
of my conscience
one shouldn't need to plea for forgiveness
it is done
Michael (MV)
Re: i bring you tonight
Okay, i give, changed it. I like your suggestion MV.
True enough, MV, it's already done, but we're not always full of that much faith and I think God likes to hear us ask. He came for the sinners not the righteous. Actually, it's a plea to be more pure more than forgiveness. Aren't we always in a state of needing forgiveness because we're never as pure (selfless) as we'd like to be.
True enough, MV, it's already done, but we're not always full of that much faith and I think God likes to hear us ask. He came for the sinners not the righteous. Actually, it's a plea to be more pure more than forgiveness. Aren't we always in a state of needing forgiveness because we're never as pure (selfless) as we'd like to be.
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Re: i bring you tonight
Billy, I like this.Like the play on borders and compass. Don't like the part about secrets
Re: i bring you tonight
Thanks, Kenneth, I'll think about it.