A Former Captain Speaks His Love Story

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SivaRamanathan
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A Former Captain Speaks His Love Story

#1 Post by SivaRamanathan » 28 Feb 2019, 20:15

To be alone on a ship at sea
to look at sunrise and sunset

the fauna and flora of the sea
to sail fifty miles towards the land

and wish to go the same fifty
into the sea

the power of being captain
challenging nature

the sea receding,
the ship squatting on land

thirteen at a table with gin and tonic
at eighteen I played around

lost a finger to the pulley which I
ought not to have pulled

yet I thrust my nose forward,
to make good my nautical grades

now my love of the sea and ships
has made me a ship-builder.

BobBradshaw
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Re: A Former Captain Speaks His Love Story

#2 Post by BobBradshaw » 28 Feb 2019, 21:18

Really nice flow and rhythm... especially liked

yet I thrust my nose forward,
to make good my nautical grades

Kenneth2816
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Re: A Former Captain Speaks His Love Story

#3 Post by Kenneth2816 » 02 Mar 2019, 08:38

I wish I had been a sailor. I love ships and thus, can relate to this poem .

capricorn
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Re: A Former Captain Speaks His Love Story

#4 Post by capricorn » 04 Mar 2019, 16:50

A beautiful poem, Siva.

Eira

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