Butterfly Effect Letter
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Butterfly Effect Letter
You lie in our bed,
The backs of his
Fingertips stroke
The inside of your thigh
Light as the delicate
Pulse of a Painted Lady.
I imagine your halting
Breath, visions of
Tidal waves, the two
Of you lost in deluge.
But you are safe from
me now, distance of
Mercators, at the far
Of the world, stabbing
Your photo with black
Knives in my eyes.
The backs of his
Fingertips stroke
The inside of your thigh
Light as the delicate
Pulse of a Painted Lady.
I imagine your halting
Breath, visions of
Tidal waves, the two
Of you lost in deluge.
But you are safe from
me now, distance of
Mercators, at the far
Of the world, stabbing
Your photo with black
Knives in my eyes.
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Re: Butterfly Effect Letter
Terrific poem... metaphor extended throughout... and that closing line is to die for... wonderful imaginative piece
Re: Butterfly Effect Letter
The second stanza can be interpreted two ways, maybe, or I'm just reading it wrong, but lost in a deluge could mean they were having fantastic sex or it could be the N's ill will imaging them drowning. Otherwise I like the poem a lot. I like the Painting Lady image and the knives.
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Re: Butterfly Effect Letter
Thanks Bob. Billly. Butterfly Effect 8s a chaos theory that states the fluttering of a butterfly wings can touch off a tsunami thousands of miles away. IDK if I believe it, but its that deluge .
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What a terrifying thought, Ken. Wonderful poem.Kenneth2816 wrote: ↑15 Mar 2019, 10:19Thanks Bob. Billly. Butterfly Effect 8s a chaos theory that states the fluttering of a butterfly wings can touch off a tsunami thousands of miles away. IDK if I believe it, but its that deluge .
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Re: Butterfly Effect Letter
I don't think the saying is to be taken literally,
but in essence means that small things
can affect great outcomes.
You switch from second to third person
in the first two lines, is that intentional.
but in essence means that small things
can affect great outcomes.
You switch from second to third person
in the first two lines, is that intentional.
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Re: Butterfly Effect Letter
Hi Kenneth,
illustrated below w/out each line capitalized, some other minor adjustments, and a recast of
"But you are safe from
me now, distance of
Mercators, at the far
Of the world,"
as
But you are safe
from me now, Mercators
away at the far
of the globe,
in the spirit of workshopping Michael (MV)
You lie in our bed,
the backs of his
fingertips stroke
the inside of your thigh,
light as the delicate
pulse of a Painted Lady.
I imagine your halting
breath, visions of tidal
waves, the two
Of you lost in deluge.
But you are safe
from me now, Mercators
away at the far
of the globe, stabbing
your photo with black
knives from my eyes.
illustrated below w/out each line capitalized, some other minor adjustments, and a recast of
"But you are safe from
me now, distance of
Mercators, at the far
Of the world,"
as
But you are safe
from me now, Mercators
away at the far
of the globe,
in the spirit of workshopping Michael (MV)
You lie in our bed,
the backs of his
fingertips stroke
the inside of your thigh,
light as the delicate
pulse of a Painted Lady.
I imagine your halting
breath, visions of tidal
waves, the two
Of you lost in deluge.
But you are safe
from me now, Mercators
away at the far
of the globe, stabbing
your photo with black
knives from my eyes.