Splinter In Your Palm

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BobBradshaw
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Splinter In Your Palm

#1 Post by BobBradshaw » 26 Apr 2019, 04:18

Splinter In Your Palm


I am the splinter you carry
secretly in your palm,
a charm you stroke
as if for good luck.

I am the two margueritas
at the end of the day,
but also the blackmail
a click away.

I am the silence at the end
of a phone call,
my presence like a perfume
your wife can almost
sniff through the line.

I am the team of lawyers
that at any moment
could arrive at your door,
papers served.

I am also smoke
from a fire you can't put out,
sometimes a wisp
of smoke as subtle

as the perfume you don’t
quite wash out of your
perfectly groomed hair.

Kenneth2816
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Re: Splinter In Your Palm

#2 Post by Kenneth2816 » 26 Apr 2019, 04:36

Wicked. Great persona poem and reminds me that
Stormy Daniels is the only qualified person Trump ever hired. Love it.

BobBradshaw
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Re: Splinter In Your Palm

#3 Post by BobBradshaw » 27 Apr 2019, 07:09

LOL.... that’s a great line

FranktheFrank
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Re: Splinter In Your Palm

#4 Post by FranktheFrank » 14 May 2019, 16:56

Bob, I am sorry I missed this poem of yours.
A different tone, different style,
but interestingly done.

capricorn
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Re: Splinter In Your Palm

#5 Post by capricorn » 17 May 2019, 15:49

I like this very much, Bob. It's different. Your first line really drew me in. I love the metaphors and occasional inner rhyme and the way the story unfolds.

The ending is brilliant


I am also smoke
from a fire you can't put out,
sometimes a wisp
of smoke as subtle

as the perfume you don’t
quite wash out of your
perfectly groomed hair.

Perhaps a different title as it's repeated in the 1st line.

Eira

BobBradshaw
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Re: Splinter In Your Palm

#6 Post by BobBradshaw » 17 May 2019, 20:10

Frank, Eira — thank you

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