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Billy
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haiku

#1 Post by Billy » 18 May 2019, 20:07

beekeeper
swings his thurible
temple in a field

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mother
i hear your laughter
above the clouds

Michael (MV)
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Re: haiku

#2 Post by Michael (MV) » 19 May 2019, 08:33

Hi Billy,

Good examples of haiku

not sure, but maybe another word for "carrying" - one even more specific


Of course, I like the 2nd the best - my personal favorite

the joyful sound

As Keats says - "a thing of beauty is a joy forever"

Laughter is a vital sign of Life

😎

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#3 Post by SivaRamanathan » 19 May 2019, 12:08

Billy, I read both poems.Can connect with the. 'temple in a field.'

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#4 Post by Michael (MV) » 19 May 2019, 18:31

Hi Billy,

reading again this morning,
and sharing this variation that occurred to me:

his buzzing chasuble,
a temple -
beekeeper in the field

^^ and I see an impressionistic canvas


And to accompany your 2nd haiku,
in which this Sunday sunrise, I'm reading "above the clouds" as "on earth as it is in Heaven"

mother
i hear your laughter
above the clouds

https://youtu.be/Yi52HjJbwVQ


Her joy continues
to rhythm & rhyme
with her boy

in UniSon

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Michael (MV)

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#5 Post by Kenneth2816 » 19 May 2019, 19:16

Like the first one best Billy. Good ecanple

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#6 Post by Billy » 19 May 2019, 20:38

Thanks, actually the first one is not right, so I changed it. I meant to say his thurible or censer, they sound alike.

SivaRamanathan
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#7 Post by SivaRamanathan » 19 May 2019, 20:47

Honestly, I will have to look it up.

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Re: haiku

#8 Post by FranktheFrank » 19 May 2019, 22:02

Billy, you know I am hopeless on these haikus
but they seem to like it.

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