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Billy
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haiku

#1 Post by Billy » 21 May 2019, 01:14

butterflies flit

flower to flower

kiss after kiss

_______



i was young once

it seemed an eternity

one long kiss

_______



as i remember

kissing the mouths

of lilies

_______



leaf in the wind

she boards the plane

blowing a kiss

_______



a kiss

in the rain

rainbow

_______



snow falling

i kiss a cheek

zip his coat

_______



a toad

jumps out of sleep

kissed by sun

________



New Year's Eve

past and future

in a kiss

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Re: haiku

#2 Post by capricorn » 21 May 2019, 02:19

Wow, Billy! These are wonderful. A train of kissing haiku.

There is so much to take in here, I'll have to read again.

Eira

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Re: haiku

#3 Post by Billy » 21 May 2019, 23:07

Thanks, Eira

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Re: haiku

#4 Post by Michael (MV) » 22 May 2019, 00:40

 
Hi Billy,

kiss-ku
haiku
that pucker-up

kiss-ku
haiku with pucker
power

kiss-ku
haiku with the power
to pucker


flitting
flower to flower
butterfly kisses


I'm esp taken with:

"i was young once

it seemed an eternity

one long kiss"


Once upon a time
I am young - the kiss
forever lingering


a sleeping toad
kissed by the moon
leaps to life - a joyful jump


New Year's Eve
a kiss to the future
kisses the past way

New Year's Eve
a future kiss is the kiss
of death to the past

New Year's Eve
the future
is just a kiss away


kisses echo
from music-video:
https://youtu.be/EJHmJuCyWA4

8)

Michael (MV)

 
 
 
 
 
 

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Re: haiku

#5 Post by Billy » 25 May 2019, 01:11

Thanks everyone, thanks Michael for the compliment of riffing off of my haiku.

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#6 Post by meenas17 » 26 May 2019, 18:22

Haiku , Billy, is hard to write.
Yours excels.
meenas17

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Re: haiku

#7 Post by Billy » 28 May 2019, 05:46

Thanks Meenas

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