House Wren

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BobBradshaw
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House Wren

#1 Post by BobBradshaw » 26 May 2019, 21:58

House Wren


Why are we looking at houses?
Well, I'm eager to show you
that my future isn't a pile
of wood shavings.

Are you familiar with the house wren,
guiding his hoped-for fiancee
from one site to another,
chirping at each potential nest
praise for its "potential"?

Finally she agrees to a site
with a grand view......its splendor
the same reason

I can't take my eyes off
the long peninsulas of your legs,
your face's fine slopes
--or your eyes, green
like new, misted leaves....

after all what other logic
can my heart follow but
location, location, location?

Kenneth2816
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Re: House Wren

#2 Post by Kenneth2816 » 27 May 2019, 01:06

Good little poem. Eso. Principal of your legs. It's just right.

Michael (MV)
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Joined: 18 Apr 2005, 04:57

Re: House Wren

#3 Post by Michael (MV) » 27 May 2019, 17:28

Hi Bob,

Lost my workshopping, again :shock:

after all what other logic
can my instincts follow but location
location, location?

Or maybe as

after all what other logic
can my gut-feelings follow but location
location, location?


Not to say I didn't enjoy this birds & the bees poem

😎

Michael (MV)

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