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Burning Man

Posted: 06 Jun 2019, 11:59
by Kenneth2816
The dead say there is a tunnel
that funnels light to pin point,
like roasting ants with a magnifying glass.

There are pieces of him everywhere-
bits of chewed nail in ashtrays,
footprints fossilizef in the Berber.

The automated voice that apologizes;
"this mailbox is full and cannot
receive any messages."

Sometimes, a man can burn so bright
with combustion of his own spontaneous humanity ,
there's nothing left but smoldering boots.

Re: Burning Man

Posted: 06 Jun 2019, 13:35
by Michael (MV)
 
Hi Kenneth,

I like how the poem arrives.

workshop-share as:

Sometimes, a man can burn
so bright with the combustion
his own spontaneous humanity,
nothing left but smoldering boots.



also:

footprints fossilized in the Berber


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Michael (MV)

 
 
 
 

Re: Burning Man

Posted: 06 Jun 2019, 16:28
by Kenneth2816
Ty Michael. Good edits

Re: Burning Man

Posted: 07 Jun 2019, 00:06
by BobBradshaw
I like the last 2 stanzas best... especially the smoldering boots. I am not sure how the ants image relates, or what it’s trying to tell me. Maybe it’s me.

Re: Burning Man

Posted: 07 Jun 2019, 00:39
by Kenneth2816
Bob, it's a take on 2 urban legends. Near death experiences and spontaneous human combustion.
It's not you. As,a kid. I used to chase smts down and
burn them using the sun and a magnifying glass Fucked up, I know
But to those ants, I was God
I changed the wording .Thanks for the comments

Re: Burning Man

Posted: 07 Jun 2019, 20:09
by BobBradshaw
Thx for the explanation....Bob