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The Return

Posted: 17 Jun 2019, 17:43
by Kenneth2816
On that great and terrible day,
The moon will hide its face,
Rivers roil and run black with blood.

The Lord will come on a cloud
In great power and glory ,assemble
The faithful according to their deeds,

Tie back Her golden hair,
Hike up Her skirt, kick them
Square in the nuts and say,

"How you like that, motherfuckers?"

Re: The Return

Posted: 18 Jun 2019, 01:49
by Michael (MV)
 
Hi Kenneth,

I got a *kick* out of this  


and the *return* on the title with poem's finale


workshop-share -

a stronger verb than "say;" for examples,

Square in the nuts and scream out,

or

Square in the nuts and yell,



8)

Michael (MV)
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 

Re: The Return

Posted: 18 Jun 2019, 03:31
by Kenneth2816
Thinks. White Christian male war on women

Re: The Return

Posted: 18 Jun 2019, 19:54
by BobBradshaw
I like this. The last 4 lines are surprising, and effective.

Re: The Return

Posted: 18 Jun 2019, 22:07
by Kenneth2816
Thanks Bob. Christianity has been hijacked by old white men who are hypocrites

Re: The Return

Posted: 18 Jun 2019, 22:22
by BobBradshaw
Many of Trump's male supporters seem to confirm that

Re: The Return

Posted: 19 Jun 2019, 09:25
by Kenneth2816
Passing laws that require a woman to carry to term even if rape or incest.

Re: The Return

Posted: 22 Jun 2019, 20:49
by Billy
Yes, the new dispensation is more rightly balanced of feminine and masculine attributes.

Re: The Return

Posted: 09 Aug 2019, 08:19
by Kenneth2816
Thanks Billy. Sorry to be so late