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"getting antique"   (a diptych)

Posted: 19 Jun 2019, 10:49
by Michael (MV)
 
 
I am                                                                                        Unique
not aging                                                                                 antiques ageless
therefore I am                                                                         in time bulbs will burn out
                                                                                              but the charmed aura from the lamp
in time evolving                                                                      shines on
an antique out of time

as the Shepherd
fleeces my patina
and collects me
priceless for eternity




  

 
 
 

Re: mid-year & will be 62 before 2020

Posted: 19 Jun 2019, 15:52
by FranktheFrank
62 isn't old Michael
76 isn't old either
82 is oldish
92 is getting on for old
The oldest British citizen died last week age 112
that is old. :)

If you don't mind me saying.

Re: mid-year & will be 62 before 2020

Posted: 20 Jun 2019, 03:55
by Kenneth2816
You always give a nod to the eternal in your work ,Michael I respect that you do so gently.

Re: mid-year & will be 62 before 2020

Posted: 20 Jun 2019, 04:31
by BobBradshaw
62? You are a youngster!

Re: mid-year & will be 62 before 2020

Posted: 21 Jun 2019, 00:48
by FranktheFrank
I am 76
broke my clavicle 3 weeks ago
i thought maybe this is it.
But it seems you have to put up with me for one more year
maybe more. :)

Re: mid-year & will be 62 before 2020

Posted: 22 Jun 2019, 20:40
by Billy
I’m loving getting older and finding out how stupid I really was. But, hey, all the shit has been cleared away. It’s more real than it’s ever been, even without sex every day.

Re: mid-year & will be 62 before 2020

Posted: 23 Jun 2019, 18:21
by Michael (MV)
Thanks every one

I'm actually living & loving(hopefully as humanly possible) the time to be elderly as passionately as the time to be young(my concert-going days)

I posted this hoping & still hoping to get some workshopping-share


Thanks

😎

Michael

Re: "getting antique"

Posted: 23 Jun 2019, 20:39
by FranktheFrank
Your poems are unique Michael
it's difficult to know how to analyse
and contribute appropriate comments.

I see the pun on bulb and lamp,

also unique and antique as regards aging

the humour in fleecing a patina the pun on sheep
we are His sheep - He is the Lamb

and I see the wistful longing when we will most certainly meet

that's the best I can do as regards workshopping.

Re: "getting antique"

Posted: 23 Jun 2019, 21:05
by SivaRamanathan
I saved a draft.Now I don't know how to post it.

Re: "getting antique"

Posted: 24 Jun 2019, 01:02
by FranktheFrank
Are you familiar with 'cut' and 'paste' Siva?

I saved a draft.Now I don't know how to post it.
I saved a draft.Now I don't know how to post it.
If not I can explain it or you can YouTube it.

Re: "getting antique"

Posted: 24 Jun 2019, 05:31
by SivaRamanathan
Where do drafts get stored ?

Re: "getting antique"

Posted: 24 Jun 2019, 13:36
by FranktheFrank
I don't know what you mean Siva,
If I want to keep a poem or comment
I use cut and past to Microsoft WORD
then cut and paste from WORD
to this forum if needed.

Re: "getting antique"

Posted: 24 Jun 2019, 14:28
by SivaRamanathan
Frank
I read the preview and clicked,but not on the submit icon.So it went into a draft format. I am sorry for wasting your time.
It is a simple change of order in the stanzas,that I had read in Michael's poem.
What if


Unique
antiques ageless -
in time bulbs will burn out
but the charmed aura from the lamp
shines on

'til the Shepherd
fleeces my patina
and collects me
for eternity (.)

Will the meaning alter?
S

Re: "getting antique"

Posted: 25 Jun 2019, 07:04
by Billy
Sorry Michael, for jumping on the old age band wagon. I was more talking about my experience of old age. I assume you are not worried about old age being a believer in the afterlife. This life is just a drop in the bucket.

As to your poem:

It works, fulfills its purpose, and has a delightful rhythm. I thinks Siva's switching the stanza's changes the meaning.

Re: "getting antique"

Posted: 25 Jun 2019, 09:38
by meenas17
Can man get antique?
Antique refers to rare, old items of high value.
Thanks.

Re: "getting antique"

Posted: 25 Jun 2019, 12:05
by SivaRamanathan
Thanks Billy.I wanted to get a clarification.
S

Re: "getting antique"

Posted: 25 Jun 2019, 12:18
by Michael (MV)
Hi meenas,

Thanks for reading & commenting

It is a metaphor -
Instead of the cliché, getting old, wasting away, "getting antique" is becoming priceless; and actually Life, not a thing, is priceless & forever


in the spirit of clarity & creativity,

😎

Michael (MV)

Re: "getting antique"

Posted: 25 Jun 2019, 12:28
by Michael (MV)
Hi Siva,

Thanks for reading & workshopping.

Log-in, then go to the User Control Panel, and find Manage drafts; there you will access the stored draft.


I save drafts often, b/c, esp these days, I can't always focus & finish in a single sitting.


😎

Michael (MV)


SivaRamanathan wrote:
24 Jun 2019, 05:31
Where do drafts get stored ?

Re: "getting antique"

Posted: 25 Jun 2019, 15:56
by FranktheFrank
We suffered from drafts for years
since putting in central-heating
we don't suffer any more.

Re: "getting antique"   (a diptych)

Posted: 29 Jun 2019, 00:07
by capricorn
Love this poem, Michael and the use of 'antique'

You're certainly not old, but in my experience, once a person gets to 60, they begin to think more about aging.
Eira

Re: "getting antique"   (a diptych)

Posted: 29 Jun 2019, 00:14
by FranktheFrank
Old people are referred to by the young
as antiques Meena
cruel I know
but I don't care
I agree with Michael, priceless