Impossible Love

Poets post their works-in-progress here for crit and commentary. We want poets who are serious about getting their work published.
Post Reply
Message
Author
MariadelosangelesC7Mendez
Posts: 3
Joined: 03 Jun 2019, 06:52

Impossible Love

#1 Post by MariadelosangelesC7Mendez » 20 Jun 2019, 05:37

Impossible Love

Maybe there is no tomorrow
only now perhaps
Neither you or me have the time
but the desire
always awaiting as set in fire
hours ending again

Kenneth2816
Posts: 959
Joined: 01 Jun 2008, 09:17

Re: Impossible Love

#2 Post by Kenneth2816 » 20 Jun 2019, 06:06

Nice first poem. I like how you play with time/hours/now/no tomorrow. Makes it all seem almost stolen love.

I wouldn't mind a stanza or two more, but brevity has its place. Welcome to the Block.

BobBradshaw
Posts: 1199
Joined: 03 Jun 2016, 21:03

Re: Impossible Love

#3 Post by BobBradshaw » 20 Jun 2019, 20:27

I echo Ken...nice

FranktheFrank
Posts: 1488
Joined: 02 Mar 2016, 18:07
Location: Between the mountains and the sea

Re: Impossible Love

#4 Post by FranktheFrank » 21 Jun 2019, 00:46

Welcome to the Writer's Block.
Neat poem.

MariadelosangelesC7Mendez
Posts: 3
Joined: 03 Jun 2019, 06:52

Re: Impossible Love

#5 Post by MariadelosangelesC7Mendez » 21 Jun 2019, 04:31

I appreciate your comments. I am so honored to be part of this group; I look forward to contributing to it as well as to be enriched by your work.

meenas17
Posts: 580
Joined: 23 Mar 2014, 11:27

Re: Impossible Love

#6 Post by meenas17 » 21 Jun 2019, 07:22

Short and sweet.
Good poem.
meenas17

FranktheFrank
Posts: 1488
Joined: 02 Mar 2016, 18:07
Location: Between the mountains and the sea

Re: Impossible Love

#7 Post by FranktheFrank » 21 Jun 2019, 12:10

Marvellous response Maria
I am sure you will enhance our forum.

Michael (MV)
Posts: 1516
Joined: 18 Apr 2005, 04:57

Re: Impossible Love

#8 Post by Michael (MV) » 22 Jun 2019, 11:50

 
Welcome Maria.

Here are poets & poems you can learn from.


8)

Michael (MV)


 
 
  

Post Reply

Return to “Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang”