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When I was a kid, the old folks 
teased , saying  you could teach 
a crow  to talk by splitting the tongue. 

You would have been proud
the way I didn't cry at your funeral
in front of perfect
strangers, like you always said.

I almost didn't come ,but who could 
resist a last look at the pinched
face,  yellow bill dividing its eyes,

one higher than the other
as if rendered by Picasso,
pink albinic feet protruding 
like a stuck-out tongue, Goddam?

Ken,
Fantastic verse.
Crows fascinate you,
" ---Yellow bill dividing its eye

one higher than the other
as if rendered by Picasso,"

These lines hold the attention.

Thank you Meenas.

I agree with Meenas...like that Picasso image best.

Either i’m dense or just missing something, but I’m quite confused. Also, goddamn isn’t capitalized unless you meant to put a period before it instead of a coma.
I suppose albinic feet could be pink. Like I said I may be i’m Dense and just need to read it a few more times which a lot of good poetry requires.

Thanx you Bob.

Billy white crows do have pink feet. Goddamm is certainly optional. I just threw it in really

Hi kenneth,

I lost my workshop response

In essence. I have suggested the finale as

albinic feet protruding 
like a pink tongue, stuck-out




Michael (MV)

Thanks Michael