Algernon Charles Swinburne
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Algernon Charles Swinburne
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Algernon Charles Swinburne
Lean like a flamingo,
he boasted a cataract of red hair—
but was just as famous
for his drunken pratfalls,
his poetry accused
of being just as confused
as he was when sloshing about
a room spilling brandy
or shrieking hysterically
like a peacock.
Yet he did have his fans,
often women who--
not knowing Algernon
preferred flogging
to copulation, pain and drunkenness
his antidotes to boredom--
would sigh and swoon
in faints of adulation
at his readings,
piling together, like coats
which slip with ease
from their hangers
onto the polished floor,
having come undone at a touch
or the thought of such.
V1:
Algernon Charles Swinburne
He was lean
like a flamingo, his beak
as distinct.
He boasted a cataract of red hair
but was just as famous
for his drunken pratfalls,
his poetry accused
of being just as confused
as he was when sloshing about
a room spilling brandy
or shrieking hysterically
like a peacock.
Yet he did have his fans,
often women who--
not knowing Algernon
preferred flogging
to copulation, pain and drunkenness
his antidotes to boredom--
would sigh and swoon
in faints of adoration
at his readings,
piling together, like coats
which slip with ease
from their hangers
onto the polished floor,
having come undone at a touch
or the thought of such.
Algernon Charles Swinburne
Lean like a flamingo,
he boasted a cataract of red hair—
but was just as famous
for his drunken pratfalls,
his poetry accused
of being just as confused
as he was when sloshing about
a room spilling brandy
or shrieking hysterically
like a peacock.
Yet he did have his fans,
often women who--
not knowing Algernon
preferred flogging
to copulation, pain and drunkenness
his antidotes to boredom--
would sigh and swoon
in faints of adulation
at his readings,
piling together, like coats
which slip with ease
from their hangers
onto the polished floor,
having come undone at a touch
or the thought of such.
V1:
Algernon Charles Swinburne
He was lean
like a flamingo, his beak
as distinct.
He boasted a cataract of red hair
but was just as famous
for his drunken pratfalls,
his poetry accused
of being just as confused
as he was when sloshing about
a room spilling brandy
or shrieking hysterically
like a peacock.
Yet he did have his fans,
often women who--
not knowing Algernon
preferred flogging
to copulation, pain and drunkenness
his antidotes to boredom--
would sigh and swoon
in faints of adoration
at his readings,
piling together, like coats
which slip with ease
from their hangers
onto the polished floor,
having come undone at a touch
or the thought of such.
Re: Algernon Charles Swinburne
Perfect, don’t change a thing. Nomination worthy or send it out.
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Re: Algernon Charles Swinburne
Nice ride. I love it.
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Re: Algernon Charles Swinburne
Billy, thank you... I might send it out... something to think about
Ken... glad you enjoyed it
Ken... glad you enjoyed it
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Re: Algernon Charles Swinburne
Thanks, Meenas
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Re: Algernon Charles Swinburne
Hi Bob,
I have liked this since I first read it earlier in the month, esp the sensuous movement that articulates - à la Swinbourne - the finale
^^ yet workshop suggesting "adulation" for "adoration"
workshop consider for the opening:
Flamingo-lean
with a beak as distinct;
he even boasted
a cataract of red hair,
but was just as famous
for his drunken pratfalls,
Michael (MV)
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Re: Algernon Charles Swinburne
Bob
Reads well.Moves forward nicely.Like the last image of coats slipping ith ease.
S
Reads well.Moves forward nicely.Like the last image of coats slipping ith ease.
S
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Re: Algernon Charles Swinburne
MIchael, Siva -- thank you
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Re: Algernon Charles Swinburne
A slight revision
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Re: Algernon Charles Swinburne
Id like to nominate it Bob
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Re: Algernon Charles Swinburne
Thank you, Ken...appreciate a nom