Who Could She Be?

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meenas17
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Who Could She Be?

#1 Post by meenas17 » 05 Sep 2019, 13:02

She is the most adorable
I go round in circles
when I notice her,
that I rarely do.

I fondle,run my fingers,
tap her. She is passive.
Feel she likes my
overtures.

Being lovely, at the same
very thoughtful, she leads
me out of adversaries
with such felicity.

She is lifelike
all the more, nestles
against me with passion
from days young.

We have a bondage.
keeps us moving
either the one of us
juxtaposing the other.

The way I turn
the spot I set my eyes
could be according
to her governance.

More or less she is
a part of me,
above and all
a greater i Pad.

She is dear
in affection, not pricey
though. Requires
least care whatsoever.

Oh! she is calling
I take quick steps.
She takes my hand
and smiles.

Such a darling
she remains.She is the
mind, beneath the brain,
my mentor.
meenas17

BobBradshaw
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Re: Who Could She Be?

#2 Post by BobBradshaw » 05 Sep 2019, 19:50

Just lovely, and so well done! Your best, or one of your best. The way you keep us guessing is a lot of fun. Kudos

Note: now that you're writing at such a high level, I would welcome, and I'm sure others would welcome, constructive criticisms from you on our pieces. Teamwork....thanks, meenas

Kenneth2816
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Re: Who Could She Be?

#3 Post by Kenneth2816 » 06 Sep 2019, 10:03

Yes this shows a great deal of creativity. It reminds me some of Emily Dickinson. Very nicely done

meenas17
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Re: Who Could She Be?

#4 Post by meenas17 » 07 Sep 2019, 14:43

Bob, I comment on other poems. Might be they are brief, I will try to involve with elaborate criticism.
Thanks Bob.
meenas17

meenas17
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Re: Who Could She Be?

#5 Post by meenas17 » 07 Sep 2019, 14:45

Ken, thanks for the comparison to Emily Dickinson.
meenas17

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