So Many Memories

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So Many Memories

#1 Post by capricorn » 12 Sep 2019, 03:14

I apologise if this poem causes offence to anyone. I posted it on another forum on the 10th anniversary of 7/11 and only had one reply saying this was all too raw for anyone to comment. I had just watched a TV programme listening to so many mini stories that moved me to write this. After the reaction I received I have kept this hidden until now but reading it again I still feel so moved by people's stories. I hope you will understand.

So Many Memories

'My husband rang me a minute after
the plane penetrated
two floors below his office.
When certain there was no
escape route,
we spent dwindling minutes
in tête–à–tête, until
a heart ripping silence
coincided with the TV picture'.

'My daughter was flying home
from Boston. Anticipation
flipped to disbelief.
I just knew
it was her plane
colliding before me'.

'I was frantic and phoned
my sister, only to hear
her company had moved
a month ago.
Relief emptied tears
down the cheeks of this
unemotional man.
until my dog – dear Jo,
jumped onto my lap
licking my face to ease the pain'.

'Two years previous
I dined in the restaurant at the top
looking at the panorama.
My imagination cannot engulf
the desperation
that drove anyone to jump
from that giant. Yet they did –
one tried to sail clutching
onto planks of wood.
One landed on a fireman
another a priest and
like swatting flies they killed them too.
The chilling thuds haunt me still'.

'I bolted out – breathless,
then hid under a car until
the towers collapsed.
My eyes were veiled
and seemed blind,
my ears were stuffed
appearing deaf.
Not even sure if I was alive
I struggled to stand
and covered in black ash
ran towards the phone box
grabbed the phone
startling a woman
in the middle of her conversation.
I phoned my wife --
Honey, I am alive'.

'Many workmen rushed in
to gather round the screen
just as the Trade Pillars collapsed.
I still hear their screams
in recurring nightmares'.

'I was in Mom’s belly
when Dad died.
She told me he was
very courageous and
loved me though we never met.
I love him too'.

Kenneth2816
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Re: So Many Memories

#2 Post by Kenneth2816 » 12 Sep 2019, 07:45

Good. I was expecting something overly emotional.

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Re: So Many Memories

#3 Post by BobBradshaw » 12 Sep 2019, 19:24

nice... I like S2 the best... love the verb flipped. Agree with Ken.... good restraint.

capricorn
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Re: So Many Memories

#4 Post by capricorn » 13 Sep 2019, 02:34

Kenneth2816 wrote:
12 Sep 2019, 07:45
Good. I was expecting something overly emotional.
Thank you Ken. I was just repeating stories I'd heard - tried not to be over emotional.

Eira

capricorn
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Re: So Many Memories

#5 Post by capricorn » 13 Sep 2019, 02:37

BobBradshaw wrote:
12 Sep 2019, 19:24
nice... I like S2 the best... love the verb flipped. Agree with Ken.... good restraint.
Thanks Bob. I listened to many stories and chose those that touched me most - the last one especially.

Eira

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Re: So Many Memories

#6 Post by Michael (MV) » 15 Sep 2019, 07:40

Hi Eira,

Mom was carrying me
when Dad died. 
She told me he was a hero
very courageous to save the stranger -
and though we never met,
he loves me & I love him too

^^ "and though we never met"
^^ I believe this - from the start of our God-created part - the HeArt

😎

Michael (MV)

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