i love the way you say goodbye

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Billy
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i love the way you say goodbye

#1 Post by Billy » 22 Sep 2019, 20:41

i love the way you say goodbye

not a tease
nor a tear wiped away
that isn’t really there

a raised hand
like a white flag
when all is lost

lips utter words
i can’t decipher
but know by heart

walking into a shadow
looking back
your face indelible

you always return
with more tears
than can be wiped away

Kenneth2816
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Re: i love the way you say goodbye

#2 Post by Kenneth2816 » 23 Sep 2019, 04:15

Been there. You nailed the cyclical nature.Good, very real

BobBradshaw
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Re: i love the way you say goodbye

#3 Post by BobBradshaw » 23 Sep 2019, 04:43

Well said....I like the subtle way you handle this

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Billy
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Re: i love the way you say goodbye

#4 Post by Billy » 03 Oct 2019, 06:40

Thanks Ken and Bob

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