Crucified scarecrow
With a pumpkin head
Summon forth
The King of the Dead
Gabriel, Gabriel
Come blow your horn
There's fire in the sky
And blood on the corn
Armageddon Day
Re: Armageddon Day
I like this, it reads like a very old medieval chant...
however.
I think it might scan better if you eliminated the "a" in the second line,
and added "Summoning" instead summon to the third one. Read it out loud.
See if it works better.
however.
I think it might scan better if you eliminated the "a" in the second line,
and added "Summoning" instead summon to the third one. Read it out loud.
See if it works better.
Re: Armageddon Day
sorry hon. sometimes I get carried away
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Re: Armageddon Day
A third stanza making the close more personal would help.
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Re: Armageddon Day
Hi Ken,
I understand Bob's workshop observation
I find with the current two, formally, they articulate like a medieval diptych
I was arriving at the space in time to enter my observation into the thread - found that Bob had entered his
Yes, a possible triptych
Michael (MV)
I understand Bob's workshop observation
I find with the current two, formally, they articulate like a medieval diptych
I was arriving at the space in time to enter my observation into the thread - found that Bob had entered his
Yes, a possible triptych
Michael (MV)
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Re: Armageddon Day
Judy... You don't get carried away..
Bob. Michael I was just trying to post something in the spirit of Halloween
..thanks
I love seeing this place pop, lots of poems lately
Bob. Michael I was just trying to post something in the spirit of Halloween
..thanks
I love seeing this place pop, lots of poems lately