the words written
in the post script
of the same letter
I posted. A comeback
I read my letter,
a simple demand
to pay a few hundreds
to an association.
to my sibling,
not a help anyway,
a 0.0001%
I hold in the business.
Those four words
sound command -like,
express scorn, reward
for being a sleeping partner,
for twenty or so years,
Legal action follows
a winding up, a strike off
happens all to soon.
Pay At Your End
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Re: Pay At Your End
Relatives and money don't mix. Nicely fine done
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Re: Pay At Your End
I like the flow of this one, meenas....nice one
Re: Pay At Your End
nice flow, meenas. two nits: "command-like" is a combo word, it takes a dash.
the other, "twenty and so years" reads better as "twenty or so years".
the other, "twenty and so years" reads better as "twenty or so years".
Re: Pay At Your End
Judy, thanks for the edits.
I have inserted a dash and changed and to or.
I have inserted a dash and changed and to or.
meenas17