Smelling the Roses
Smelling the Roses
When you finally realize
that smelling the roses
means finding thorns hidden
under the leaves
you no longer stop by the side of the road
to pick them
although, to be fair,
sometimes you do roll down the window
for just a whiff
as you speed on by
that smelling the roses
means finding thorns hidden
under the leaves
you no longer stop by the side of the road
to pick them
although, to be fair,
sometimes you do roll down the window
for just a whiff
as you speed on by
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Re: Smelling the Roses
Nice thought, but total cliche that brings not much new or fresh. Again, nice thought
Re: Smelling the Roses
Fair enough, but we gotta start somewhere. First thing I've written in five years. =)
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Re: Smelling the Roses
I don't think it's a cliche...it starts with a cliche and finds a new way of expressing its idea...I like the humor and the voice in this
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Re: Smelling the Roses
Gotcha judy. I'm just glad you're here
Re: Smelling the Roses
Bob, come sit by me on the comfy bench in the sun. You're both right. I'm glad Im here too, and no im not a sensitive blossom, I'm just delighted that one small wheel started to turn, up there. Finally. It's hard, sometimes, to realize that maybe you've used up all the words and the ideas, but maybe just being around other poets helps. I dunno.
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Re: Smelling the Roses
It helps, and poetry is usually best when it’s a team effort
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Re: Smelling the Roses
Seems a good start
add the word 'prick' in there
that will add drama.
We would like you to stay
but, don't burn up.
add the word 'prick' in there
that will add drama.
We would like you to stay
but, don't burn up.
Re: Smelling the Roses
A senyru I wrote:
twilight
a skunk stops
to smell the roses
twilight
a skunk stops
to smell the roses
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Billy, i like that. Even a skunk has feelings. =)
Frank, I don't burn easily, trust me. ahaha I like your style,
but the whole idea is about a 'prick' of sorts, don't want to
be totally redundant there.
Frank, I don't burn easily, trust me. ahaha I like your style,
but the whole idea is about a 'prick' of sorts, don't want to
be totally redundant there.