Planters Moon

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Kenneth2816
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Planters Moon

#1 Post by Kenneth2816 » 25 Oct 2019, 16:09

Now that drought has killed
any hope of harvest, the sky
stumbles in drunk with rain.

I plant my feet in knee-high corn,
twist stalks and pull like Krishna
jerking a top knot.

What fusarium doesn't wilt
succumbs to nematodes.
Being a planter makes you crazy

like the celery farmer next county over
who lost his wife to root rot.
Pig Latin coursing through his brain

year after year of crop failure
staying up nights with a stick
to drive mice from the rows -

He buried his children until
only their heads broke ground.
This is the time for turning under .

I cleave a worm with my spade,
watch its two parts writhe and wonder
how the other half lives.

BobBradshaw
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#2 Post by BobBradshaw » 25 Oct 2019, 23:11

What a wonderful bleak poem! Love the imagery, the topknot, the drunken sky, etc. Terrific close after setting it up with the farmer who has lost his wife and children....

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#3 Post by judyt547 » 26 Oct 2019, 03:39

I agree, this is just plain fun.

Kenneth2816
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#4 Post by Kenneth2816 » 27 Oct 2019, 02:46

Thank you both. Halloween brings stuff out 😎

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Billy
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#5 Post by Billy » 28 Oct 2019, 22:04

Yes, great imagination and well-written. Stanza’s 1,4,5,6, 7 are my favorites, but all good.

Kenneth2816
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#6 Post by Kenneth2816 » 28 Oct 2019, 22:14

Thanks Billy

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#7 Post by meenas17 » 29 Oct 2019, 06:06

The last stanza is strong.
Man's inability to that of a worm's possibility.
Great imagery.
meenas17

Kenneth2816
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#8 Post by Kenneth2816 » 29 Oct 2019, 22:34

Thank you meenas

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