Red Spider Lilies

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BobBradshaw
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Red Spider Lilies

#1 Post by BobBradshaw » 28 Oct 2019, 09:53

Red Spider Lilies


Spider lilies line our garden path,
like a crowd carrying red candles.
It's said they guide the dead
to their afterlife.

We strode this same walkway,
hands laced together.
Under August nights, we shared
moon cakes and Li Bo's poems...

By fall you had dropped your hand
for the last time from mine.
It's said red spider lilies grow
along the path where lovers last depart,

and sure enough more and more
of them leap up from the soil.
Resigned, I think of you
as too distant to be retrieved,

like a released sky lantern, drifting
towards someone else's embrace

Kenneth2816
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Re: Red Spider Lilies

#2 Post by Kenneth2816 » 28 Oct 2019, 11:33

Bob, this is one of your best. Effortless.

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Billy
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Re: Red Spider Lilies

#3 Post by Billy » 28 Oct 2019, 22:06

Wow! No nits.

meenas17
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Re: Red Spider Lilies

#4 Post by meenas17 » 29 Oct 2019, 06:04

Flowers extend companionship.
Well written.
meenas17

BobBradshaw
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Re: Red Spider Lilies

#5 Post by BobBradshaw » 29 Oct 2019, 21:37

Thank you, guys....

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