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Emily Dickinson, In Love
Posted: 09 Jan 2020, 21:28
by BobBradshaw
Emily Dickinson, In Love
Though never spoken of
marriage had been in the air—
as inevitable as pollen--
or birdsong in mid-summer.
Imagine when she heard—
Henry—engaged—
her heart's chandelier--
wrecked on the heart's floor.
Re: Emily Dickinson, In Love
Posted: 15 Jan 2020, 21:36
by BobBradshaw
revised
Re: Emily Dickinson, In Love
Posted: 16 Jan 2020, 17:39
by SivaRamanathan
Bob
I am not quite sure about the 'heart's floor'.It sounds contrived.
Siva
Re: Emily Dickinson, In Love
Posted: 16 Jan 2020, 22:16
by BobBradshaw
I “borrowed” that image from an Emily Dickinson poem...wanted to make the poem more authentic. However, that doesn’t keep it from sounding contrived in this poem. Thx for commenting,Siva
Re: Emily Dickinson, In Love
Posted: 17 Jan 2020, 08:58
by SivaRamanathan
Bob
Now I understand.It is ----------.(I forget the word,there is a term for it,we learnt it in literature) I didn't realize you were trying to be authentic to Dicksonian Poetry, Let me read and reread it, and maybe I will get used to it.
Siva
Re: Emily Dickinson, In Love
Posted: 17 Jan 2020, 09:02
by SivaRamanathan
Bob
Nice imagery here.
as inevitable as pollen
or birdsong in mid-summer.
You need a full stop at the end of the poem, after 'loose.'
Re: Emily Dickinson, In Love
Posted: 17 Jan 2020, 10:11
by BobBradshaw
Thx, Siva....the period at the end has been rolled into place. By the way, happy new year, and may you write many wonderful poems in 2020....best, Bob
Re: Emily Dickinson, In Love
Posted: 18 Jan 2020, 11:12
by SivaRamanathan
Bob,
It is Pongal season now. The15th was Pongal for the Sun God,The 16th Pongal for the cattle,17th the Sight-seeing Pongal.And thank you for your good heart.
Siva
Re: Emily Dickinson, In Love
Posted: 21 Jan 2020, 09:20
by BobBradshaw
major trim....